[RealKevM]

Well here we go again..as ever, my voice is a work in progress (actually seeing some improvement lol) i'd be interested to hear what you think to the song.

https://soundcloud.com/realkevm2/brother-acoustic

I'll always be three days older and
You'll always be that little bit bolder
Like the time you put coins in your eye
No wonder you're going blind

You always looked out for me like
The time we got caught stealing from HMV
I thought they'd call the police but
You has the shirts up your sleeve

Chorus

You're like the brother I never had
Except I don't go around beating up my day
I know if you got that call late one night
You'd be there to catch my fall and
make things alright

2nd verse
We stayed at a strangers house
Ate their food we proper wiped them out
You took all their tapes
I was left with a belly ache
You soon left for Germany
Came back to take on the Queen
I'd do it all again
Thinking about you my oldest friend

https://soundcloud.com/realkevm2/brother-acoustic

[pompeyjazz]

This was great Kev. Sounded to me that it was really from the heart. The whole feel is great.  The vocals are maybe a bit dirty but sometimes that just works with the overall vibe of the song. I really enjoyed this song and I like your approach and attitude 

[RealKevM]

Thank you man. Thanks for taking the time to listen I really appreciate it.

[Mike67]

I liked it too, and I could hear a fully produced song in my head as I was listening. Some tweaks to the phrasing might lift the chorus, along with a tweak to the melody, at least that's how I heard it in my head. Loads of potential here, and I do like the theme.

[RealKevM]

Thank you Mike. I only wrote it last week so you're definitely right, some tweaking is in order.

[rightly]

I see plenty of potential here
The voice is beautiful
but so squashed, compressed

Lovely song though, take a rest and give it another go.

Really nice

[RealKevM]

Thank you for having a listen and the kind words.

[Larsen B]

I can imagine this song working well with a fairly low key bass and drums. Great lyrics - intriguing!
Agree with others - this has potential

[RealKevM]

Cheers Larsen. I just played it live this evening for the first time and it went down really well. I'll continue to polish it though.

[RealKevM]

I've also recorded a version for youtube if anyone fancies a watch

[Ramshackles]

Guitar sound on the youtube version is much nicer. Still a little thin, but fuller and more natural than on the recorded version.

I think it could help your vocals to plan out the melody on guitar and then rehearse it to death. Even if you plan to diverge from the melody for effect/emotion, it can be helpfully to be able to sing through it, almost robotically, making sure you know precisely where your voice should be headed for each note.

[RealKevM]

Thank you mate, you're absolutely right. It's all over the place in parts.

[RealKevM]

Hi guys, sorry to bump an old thread, hope it's ok.
I did a version of this just now and thought i'd share it. To me it's interesting to see how the song has developed since March and my vocals are a lot better (I think?)

[Cawproductions]

Hi There Kev.

This is a great song, got nice structure to the lyrics too. Only thing I would say is think about dynamics, drop the strumming intensity and vocal down a bit in the verses then ramp up into the chorus.

Vocal is improving all the time dude.

Keep em coming Kev, you write some nice songs.

Great listen here
Andy

[RealKevM]

Nice one, cheers Andy. Good point, I am trying to do that dynamic already in the song, i'll try it as you've described, see how it goes. Cheers man.