Hi Jamie,
Lovely sounds, i especially like the opening sequence, very Radiohead! That could also become you're chorus, the second section sounds great but maybe a bit much going on for a verse vibe, maybe you could simplify it a bit.
The part around 1.00 sounds simpler and could actually make a great verse.
The following sequence 1.28 could make a great bridge and or outro
You have all the elements, Go For It.
I'm hearing angst and melancholy, could be completely wrong though!