Hi,
I read through your lyrics and have a few thoughts on getting more out of your lyrics.
You say that you imagine sitting on a stool with just a guitar which straight away told me that this was going to be an intimate lyric. So when i read your lyrics they didn't fall into that category for me. I would suggest being more direct with your lyrics so ive written some ideas/examples down below in bold text for you to consider.
Schooldays
Drove past the school of my youth
Just the other day
the one where all my dreams started
drove past the school of my youth
just the other day
the one where it all started to go wrong
I would have written this first verse like this...
I drove past my school today
the one where all my dreams began
I drove past my school today
and now i'm thinking
that's the place
where it all went wrongsome of the teachers that were then
are still in the same classrooms now
The teachers that i knew
all thought i was a foolI didn't look right , I didn't look left
I just kept my eyes on the road
I was a bad boy at school
I was a bad boy at school
I broke all the rules that they had
I would have said this chorus lyric this way...I was a bad boy at my school
an instigator troublemaker
yeah all the teachers knew
i felt so let down
oh yeah...
they were cruelThese are just a few ideas to think about to help bring your song out more lyric wise.
I hope this helps.
Johnny