[Jimsaloud]

Happy Saturday all,

Thank you very much for the comments on my last post!

I am still experimenting with GarageBand and wanted the post another song. This was something I wrote early in the morning while playing on a small Casio keyboard. Just singing to simple chords and thought the chorus was good if not original. The lyrics are unecessarily grim (not from the heart...) and need fixing. I know it’s cheesy but would welcome any comments on the arrangement and chorus. Does it need reworking to not be too by the numbers? Thank you!

https://soundcloud.com/user-5387438/flames

Silence, darkness, broken eyes
The devil’s beach I lay my head
On the day I took my life
To see them all see me instead

But look at me now x 2
I am hundred thousand feet above you
Look at me now x 2
Now the world is going up in flames
And I don’t want to take the blame
Look at me now x 2

[Katie Wilson]

Good stuff enjoyed it xxx

[RealKevM]

Decent mate, the Chorus especially the 'Look at me now' part is really catchy.

[pompeyjazz]

Hi Jimbob and welcome to the forum. Yep, Garageband is some awesome software. This is good considering how much time you devoted to it. You've got a good voice man. Sorry to be a monger of doom but you're only allowed to post one song in the Finished Songs section every two weeks.  I know that's a real pissed and I hate to be the bearer of bad news  Also you kinda need to give something back to the forum like reviewing some of the songs on here. I don't want to be Mr Badass as I appreciate your talent but that's how it works 

Cheers

Pompeyjazz

[Jimsaloud]

Fair play, Pompey. Hadn’t seen the two week rule but makes sense. Consider me told!

And thanks for the nice comments on the song man. All good.