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Read January 12, 2018, 10:19:08 AM #0
Katie Wilson

I dream of being Katie Wilson

This lost any rhythm as I wrote it

I dream of being Katie Wilson

I dream of being Katie Wilson
don't take away that chance
don't you see my face when I dance

As all my sadness seeps through the floorboards
of the discotheque
and the memories disappear for a while

don't take me back there
don't take my dreams away
and let my mind think of him

let me spin and spin and spin
as the tears roll down my face

I dream of being Katie Wilson
don't take away that chance
don't you see my face when I dance

Ok to you I'm a man in a dress
Looking a fool to all

everyone stares as the music blares
and there I am the fool
dancing alone
with no shoes on
I'm my favourite shiny gold dress

I dream of being Katie Wilson
and the violence stops
and so do the memories

As all my sadness disappears through the floorboards
of the discotheque



I need to be myself , I can't be no one else
 
Read January 12, 2018, 11:23:25 AM #1
cowparsleyman

Re: I dream of being Katie Wilson

Hi Katie

Some really nice ideas in there, like someone said earlier in some of you posts, you are kind of mixing up Poetry and Lyrics.

Try digging out some of your favourites song, take a look at them, are they more like poetry or a lyric?

Many very famous songs don't really make much sense, but DO stick in you mind because the melody they are carried by is so hooky.

There is always the option to remove a word, and let the tune carry on, rather than show horn a word in...I'm doing that more these days.

Good luck

CPM


 
Read January 12, 2018, 12:17:17 PM #2
Katie Wilson

Re: I dream of being Katie Wilson

Hi Katie

Some really nice ideas in there, like someone said earlier in some of you posts, you are kind of mixing up Poetry and Lyrics.

Try digging out some of your favourites song, take a look at them, are they more like poetry or a lyric?

Many very famous songs don't really make much sense, but DO stick in you mind because the melody they are carried by is so hooky.

There is always the option to remove a word, and let the tune carry on, rather than show horn a word in...I'm doing that more these days.

Good luck

CPM

Thanks I'll do that




I need to be myself , I can't be no one else
 
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