Many thanks again for the excellent feedback and suggestions. I have posted a new version, incorporating minor changes to the intro, beginning vocal and the bridge.
Unusual structure for me in that what you have labelled as the chorus is a few repeated lines...kind of like the refrain that you might find at the end of the verses in a folk song or whatever....
Agreed, it's more of a refrain than a full chorus: I wanted it to reflect the idea of recalling a memory, if that makes sense
I thought this one sounded stronger as it progressed, you seemed to deliver your vocals more confidently as we got into the body of the piece.
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I have re-recorded the beginning vocals ... I was perhaps a little tentative on the original.
Happy birthday to David Bowie today.
This song sounds like he is still with us 
Many thanks .... There is a big Bowie festival on here in Dublin at the moment. I have been to 3 Bowie cover bands in the last 3 nights, with one more to go tonight .. whew, I am worn out!
Subtlety defines this one ... really liked the twist in the lyrics in the last verse - made it both sad and triumphant.
Many thanks, that was exactly the mood I was trying to convey
A big David McBowie thing going on again, which is tres cool. Though he'd have had a calf length leather coat, not just leather on the elbows.
Very true
