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Read December 06, 2017, 10:01:33 PM #0
Mutrins

I Thought That Would Be Me (working title)

Hello wonderful people of the forum,

Working on another track, currently titled "I Thought That Would Be Me". It's a more ballad-y type, end of love, you can't help someone they can only help themselves sort of song.

I appreciate any feedback! Thanks so much

https://soundcloud.com/micky-shiloah/i-thought-that-would-be-me-1/s-PT18b

Lyrics:
I don't wanna leave this
I feel like i've fallen too deep now
Too deep now

But I keep giving chances
Only to end up the fool again somehow
Again somehow

And I know it's had believe me I've been there
But once in a while, you've gotta let go
And give everything you have to someone you know

Chorus:
And I thought that would be me
I thought that would be me
I thought that you'd be mine
If I gave you a little time
I thought that would be me
I thought we were on the same damn road
But you're headed somewhere on your own
God, I was wrong all along

And I've been done so many times
I can't remember
I can't remember when it felt right
If it even ever felt right

But you were never mine, never mine
Never mind, I was out of my mind
Hoping I could help you find all the answers in this short while
All the answers in this short while

And I know it's hard, believe me i've been there
But you've gotta give everything to someone you know

Chorus:
And I thought that would be me
I thought that would be me
I thought that you'd be mine
If I gave you a little time
I thought that would be me
I thought we were on the same damn road
But you're headed somewhere on your own
God, I was wrong all along

And I know it's hard believe me I've been there
But you've gotta give everything to someone you know

Chorus:
And I thought that would be me
I thought that would be me
I thought that you'd be mine
If I gave you a little time
I thought that would be me
But, I know that you're not mine
I know that you're not mine
I know that you're not mine
 
Read December 07, 2017, 12:31:32 AM #1
Boydie

Re: I Thought That Would Be Me (working title)

Please read the guidelines about posting songs:

http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?topic=2564.0

I would like to draw your attention to the rule where you can only post 1 song in this section for review every 2 weeks

Your last song was posted on 29 November 2017

I will therefore lock this post

Please feel free to PM me when the 2 weeks have elapsed and I will gladly unlock it for you

Please use this period to review other people, which will encourage others to review your future songs - which I hope will posted following the guidelines  Wink


To check out my music please visit:

http://soundcloud.com/boydiemusic

Twitter: https://twitter.com/BoydieMusic
 
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