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Read December 03, 2017, 02:06:33 PM #0
pompeyjazz

World Controlled By Machines

It's all too easy to get wrapped up in the wonderful array of VST instruments that are available these days, so I wanted to do something quite raw and raunchy  Grin

This is about the effect of technology on our lives

A big thank you to Neil C for providing me with some wonderful harp  Smiley

https://soundcloud.com/pompeyjazz/world-controlled-by-machines

World Controlled By Machines

Red and green – The world's controlled by machines
Red and green – The world's controlled by machines

Self tuning - automatic
Instant cleansing – Eco static
Root embedded system cron
Chip controller function gone

Red and green – The world's controlled by machines
Red and green – The world's controlled by machines

System error – Hardware check
Auto reboot – System tech
Reset firmware – Bios blown
Garbage process overload

Red and green – The world's controlled by machines
Red and green – The world's controlled by machines

(c) Bradley - 2017
 
Read December 03, 2017, 02:17:54 PM #1
Paulski

Re: World Controlled By Machines

Hey John

You've outdone yourself again - awesome song!
Lots to like love - great guitars, drums, lyrics, harp etc etc...
It labours painfully just like heavy rock should!

Good stuff lads  Grin Grin
Paul
 
Read December 03, 2017, 03:05:30 PM #2
shadowfax

Re: World Controlled By Machines

Mega heavy track!! really like it..one crit though,I think you could sing it better a tone lower..otherwise..cool Cool Cool
 
Read December 03, 2017, 11:29:14 PM #3
Silver Machine

Re: World Controlled By Machines

A stompin' great sound, man. Yeah you got big boots all over this.
It's got that We Will Rock You feeling.
Maybe the vocals were a little rough at the start,  but it soon hits that stompin stride and you can hear the leather.
That mouth harp is freakin' awesome, add the slide aswell and you got some  real When the Levee Breaks moments.
My kinda music - its raw, its loud, things get broken.
Stonkin'.
 
Read December 05, 2017, 07:16:59 AM #4
PaulyX

Re: World Controlled By Machines

This is oily, dirty, grimey raaawwwk, man.
The sound choices in the verses in particular are awesome.
A good example of why sometimes a slower tempo can just be full of POWER. Slow is the new fast, I reckon.
A great ear-cleanser.


It's all too beautiful.
 
Read December 05, 2017, 08:35:30 AM #5
PaulAds

Re: World Controlled By Machines

Aye...a geet big hackey menacing sound with a cuddy-load of attitude and lyrics that are liable to prove even more prophetic when we have the benefit of hindsight.

Another trail-blazer  Smiley



heart of stone, feet of clay, knob of butter
 
Read December 05, 2017, 07:03:39 PM #6
Viscount Cramer & His Orchestra

Re: World Controlled By Machines

I have to admit on first listen I wasn't keen on the vocal...a bit too raw. As somebody else said it grows into the song as you go...and subsequent listens I got used to it.

Wonder if you should not start with the 'red and green' bit...just a thought. Verses with those couplets got more instant appeal so I'd start there and hit 'em with the 'red and green' later.

Funny Kmac suggests going down a tone....I think you were struggling a bit to get low enough on the 'ecostatic' bit so I'd go up a tone.

Nice harp by Neil but the guitar's the star here.

Power!

Big bang ending!


Take it easy.

You can check my stuff out here. Mini-album getting bigger slowly. Free download if you're poor.

Easy Life - Viscount Cramer
 
Read December 05, 2017, 10:39:59 PM #7
mickyplankton

Re: World Controlled By Machines

Awesome song Pompey. (Love how all your songs are so different!)

The stomping guitar and mouth organ are the stars for me. Like classic Led Zep but with a modern twist. Could possibly go up a tone on the vocals, possibly some more effects on them too. But whatever you do with the vocals, its that stomping riff that is what will grab the listener by the short and curlies!
 
Read December 05, 2017, 11:09:45 PM #8
pompeyjazz

Re: World Controlled By Machines

Thanks so much everyone. The plan is to wait until my wife goes out and then re-record the vocals at full throttle maybe after a salt gargle  Smiley Up tone, down tone, maybe.  I'll have to see what happens  Grin
 
Read December 06, 2017, 09:49:33 AM #9
MIchaelA

Re: World Controlled By Machines

Hi Pompeyjazz, there's a big mixture of styles there in your cast iron melting pot. Insane!

This would be amazing played live and loud in a rock venue pub, loads of boozy punters soaking up the manic atmosphere you create. Untamed this one! Great lyrics too. Nice one.
 
Read December 07, 2017, 10:33:55 AM #10
Yodasdad

Re: World Controlled By Machines

Nicely done,

I was watching videos about the D wave quantum computer last night and it's capabilities and applications are astounding and a bit frightening. According to its creator, in 15 years machines will be better than humans in every conceivable way.

You're definitely onto something with this one.

Mixed and blended with your usual finesse.

Loved the gob organ and the slide guitar and, don't take this the wrong way, but your voice had a particular 'I've been sucking on an exhaust all night' quality this time, that really lends itself to the track.

Good work.

Yodasdad
 
Read December 12, 2017, 07:13:47 PM #11
pacho

Re: World Controlled By Machines

How someone said, Powerfull slow Tempo
Is sounds to me like rolling stone.. Not a band , but like object Cheesy Slowly destroying everything in his way.
I can see it in Pub, I like it.. Maybe little less reverb??
 
Read Yesterday at 08:14:19 AM #12
crystalsuzy

Re: World Controlled By Machines

Love the concept John Shocked A great heavy rock that seems to move along like some heavy machine....
 like pacho said, "destroying everything in it's path" Shocked
Love the harp and raw guitar  Shocked Great lyrics! Can't wait to hear the vocals re-recorded Smiley
 
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