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Read December 02, 2017, 09:22:59 PM #0
schahinmusic

Your Lover Is In Love With Me

Hey guys,
what do you think of this? Any lines you like? Any lines you don't understand or would replace? I'm not a Native English speaker so any recommendations on grammar etc are greatly appreciated. Do you get the meaning of the song?


Your Lover Is in Love with me

Verse1
I heard that someone else is sitting in my seat
Oh gosh, the seat was still warm, didn't even wait before you see
somebody
who I promise you
aint capable of replacing me

Thirty-three
still not mature enough to handle me
I had warned you that
I was bigger than the ones that you had
before, but what happened before
it ain't relevant no more

Prechorus
And I know you will kiss him the way I kissed you
And I know you will touch all the parts I touched too
And you know he's a fool
he thinks it's coming from you

And I know you will please him the way I pleased you
And I know you will teach him the things I taught you
And I know he can't see
it is all coming from me

Chorus
So you think you can give my love away?
he thinks its yours, the only reason that he stays
But you know actually
Your lover's in love with me

Verse2
I kissed your neck
you turned your back
on me and my unkissed neck
I hit the deck
as you left
explosions on my heart, come back
and pick me up off the ground
where you leave your lovers scrounge around

I wanted you
I trusted you
I wish I knew
it's dangerous to
trust someone with trust issues
no trust means no crush on you
You can't just touch a soul and take a toll
by leaving a big hole


Prechorus
And I know you will kiss him the way I kissed you
And I know you will touch all the parts I touched too
And you know he's a fool
he thinks it's coming from you

And I know you will please him the way I pleased you
And I know you will teach him the things I taught you
And I know he can't see
it is all coming from me

Chorus
So you think you can give my love away?
he thinks its yours, the only reason that he stays
But you know actually
Your lover's in love with me
 
Read December 06, 2017, 01:00:56 PM #1
2tuoo

Re: Your Lover Is In Love With Me

schahinmusic,

Great emotion and idea in this song!
I'm struggling a bit with the structure of the verses, they seem to be very different in length and pace  - do you have a musical idea behind it? Are you able to hum the melody or rhythm to yourself?


Have a great day!
 
Read December 08, 2017, 02:30:20 PM #2
shortwhat

Re: Your Lover Is In Love With Me

this is quite refreshing, a nice emotive piece with a different subject, but some lines did sort of confuse me a little, for example;

And I know you will kiss him the way I kissed you
And I know you will touch all the parts I touched too

so you're saying that the protagonist and 'you' have kissed, but also that the protagonist has had some sort of relationship with the 'you's' new lover, it's a little tricky to work out who's been in a relationship with who, although maybe I'm just illiterate aha. Nice one with this:)


16, singer-songwriter

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