Mulholland Drive by Joe Antaine

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JoeAntaine

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« on: December 01, 2017, 09:59:17 AM »


You act like it's funny but its not.
If we're just shadowboxing
Why am I rocked with every shot.
You taken everything I got,
But you just keep on swinging until the light starts dimming.
Pour me another then I'm yours.
Or wait an hour or two
And lift me of the floor.
Then I'm easy to ignore.
You can keep it buried.
I'll wipe it from my memory.

We'll wait for Hollywood
Where we won't be misunderstood.
We'll buy a place on Mulholland Drive.
We'll stroll the walk of fame
And search for,Brando's name.
We'll be so happy we arrived.

We've lived many lifetimes for our years.
Now when I'm looking back
There's only souvenirs.
Not a memory to hold dear.
But you can often twist it.
If nothing your persistent.
Can't clear the chaos in our wake,
No conscience left to spare,
No more rules to break,
Or soul we can't forsake.
I'm sure with exception
Its either you or bedlam.

We'll wait for Hollywood
Where we won't be misunderstood.
We'll buy a place on Mulholland Drive.
We'll stroll the walk of fame
And search for,Brando's name.
We'll be so happy we arrived

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« Reply #1 on: December 01, 2017, 10:26:35 AM »
Nice production and you have a good voice( sounds a little like Take That?). Catchy chorus.

JoeAntaine

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« Reply #2 on: December 02, 2017, 02:25:17 AM »
Thank you my friend.

pacho

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« Reply #3 on: December 02, 2017, 04:50:19 PM »
Waw , nice i like but.. But when i first saw power director i trought it gonna be shit.. But wau.. i like instruments starting at 0:28... I like it a lot . FL Studio?

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« Reply #4 on: December 02, 2017, 06:57:36 PM »
What you asking?

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« Reply #6 on: December 02, 2017, 07:27:55 PM »
Hi joe,

Sounds like a cool track.
Vocal is nice,  Like the Backing vocals, Nice production..Sounds very Midi tho and a bit too quantised for me. Not a bad thing if thats the vibe you were going for.

Can t really dis it too much.

Great work that man.
Andy

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« Reply #7 on: December 02, 2017, 08:46:06 PM »
Thanks for your feedback.

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« Reply #8 on: December 02, 2017, 09:28:18 PM »
Very professional. A little too overproduced for my ears, but I do like the song. It's catchy. Reminds me of Queen in their later years. My only suggestion would be for you to lift the vocals slightly. They sound slightly underpowered. Cheers Micky

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« Reply #9 on: December 02, 2017, 10:26:59 PM »
Thanks again.

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« Reply #10 on: December 02, 2017, 10:53:29 PM »
Hi Joe, very well thought out, recorded and produced and very modern sounding. Maybe I'm an old fart (actually I am one) but it was far too clean, precise and faultless for me. Loved the chords progressions and melody though. Just thought that it could work better more stripped down

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« Reply #11 on: December 02, 2017, 10:59:07 PM »
Thanks for the feedback. Stripped solo piano vocal versios will be up on youtube soon. On my channel check out the ballad of reg and ron. Again thank you my friend.

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« Reply #12 on: December 02, 2017, 11:16:07 PM »
No problem man. That's just my opinion though. I would say just do what works for you  :)

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« Reply #13 on: December 02, 2017, 11:51:36 PM »
Your opinion matters mate. Im glad you had a listen to my track. Thank you I mean that.

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« Reply #14 on: December 03, 2017, 12:28:08 PM »
Super song!

I liked its cleanliness, well orchestrated!

You have a great voice and it really shows in the chorus. In verses, it felt like you were holding yourself it some emotional content got lost which made me anticipate the chorus and a little less focused in the verses
Have a great day!