Hey!
You know, i really find your work interesting. But it makes me feel inferior, dumb even, because most of it goes sailing over my head. Of the three here, i like the last one best, it's got the flow of the Nile. Are you a musician, or just a wordsmith? If it's the latter, my advice to you, is to find a website for budding poets. You may get more feedback there, from people that are a whole lot smarter than me. Not in any way trying to get rid of you though, please keep posting and trying to connect.
And get some sleep
Vintage54