[PaulAds]

Apologies in advance over this one, because

1) it was written in February and I wasn’t intending to ever put it in “finished songs” as I’d previously posted it in “lyrics” instead. I was never happy with it, but recently tried to tidy it up.

2) my reviews have been a little thin on the ground lately as I’ve been really busy...so please don’t anyone feel in any way obliged to review this...quite a few of my forum friends very kindly reviewed it earlier.

Tumbleweeds are cool.

Ultimately, I did want to blow another raspberry in the general direction of the mainstream and also to showcase the brilliant Omar Hakim (loop loft) drum loops I used.

https://soundcloud.com/thefuneralcrasher/requiem-for-the-suicided

If you shine a light in places
where the shadows hide the faces
Of the puppet-masters pulling all the strings
With distortions and omissions
reinforcing your suspicions
You're engaging in some very foolish things

This is a requiem for the suicided
uninvited "shouldn’t write it" journalistic types
They can feed you some exclusive
But you must be less intrusive
Like the other Tippex-wielding gutter snipes

You must know you cannot fight it
It's expertly expedited
But you want to see the face behind the mask
And you're always taking chances
when you're looking for the answers
To questions that you're not supposed to ask

This is a requiem.
Someone suicided them.

If you iron out the creases
and you find too many pieces
Of a puzzle you're not meant to figure out
It all gets pretty sloppy
Before you've even posted copy
Suicide. Without a shadow of a doubt.

 

[Silver Machine]

Man that is a powerful trio sound. The sound you'd imagine three bodybuilders to make if they had guitar ,bass and drums. Dude it had me flexing and posing and reaching for the Creatine!
But hey these musclemen can really write a tune aswell. Make that flexing, posing, and humming along.
Great lyrics with lotsa intrigue and mystery, and paranoia?
It was like a detective or spy story, but obviously with bodybuilders.
I gotta hear this again. Top stuff, man!

Oh yeah one thing, is suicided a word?

[pacho]

Wauu .. I dont know what to saw
I get a little scary mood of out it.. I can imagine to see in in stage...

"If you shine a light in places
where the shadows hide the faces"
Exactly this form i see it in stage
something like game of light and shadows.
 I like to give to my song names that dont have nothing to do with song..
This one i would name Game of Light and Shadow.

 Just wauu. I like so much . little scary, i can feel something that i cant get how to say it.. maybe somthing strange. Calm and  full of sound in the same time..
Wau

Maybe sometimes i sound to me little sin tempo .. for example in the chorus. Guitar and vocals
But wau. very creative

[Skub]

Yo Paul.

I've just read the lyrics and approve entirely.

Pointed,eloquent and incisive.

I'll get to listen later.

Edit..

I remember the song,I'd listened a while back. Very Jam or early Attractions like and drives relentlessly.

The music is up there with the quality of the lyrics.

I don't know why you weren't happy with the song Paul,it's a belter.

[pompeyjazz]

Hi Paul, I'm always really interested in song development and I thought that this was a stonker when you posted it at FAWM. The lyrics firstly are so dead on, the energy reminds me of some of the early Jam stuff. What can I say man ? Totally my kind of song. Wau

[ScottLevi]

Hey Paul,

Must've missed this in the lyric's section, 'cos it ent ringing no bells and they're definately ones to remember!

Those verses are crafted so well rhythmicly and to acheive that with killer-no-filler lines like "Like the other Tippex-weilding gutter snipes' is very satisfying.

Nice instrumental, I like the variation throughout.

If I were desperate to constructive, and you were writing this song specifically for my taste, I'd have maybe liked the break (or some form) a little earlier on. There's a lot said in the first two verses would like more time to reflect xD.

Keep 'em coming!

All the best,
Scott.

[shadowfax]

How could you not be happy with this?
your an intellectual in the songwriting dept mate..for sure

[mickyplankton]

Hey Paul. Another quality song from you. Very Jam/Manics like. And as others have mentioned, excellent lyrics.

I must confess, I struggled a bit with the drum rythm in the verse. It's clever, but At times it feels like its holding the flow of the song back. I much prefer the more conventional drumming in the chorus. I think it's probably just me, so don't take it as a criticism, just my experience of the song.

Love all the rest of it.

Cheers

Micky

[Cawproductions]

Hey dude,

Like the song, lyrics are clever too, 

Track has a nice drive feel for me, my style..Is it two different keys as It felt like you moved from one key to another, smoothly too. Clever chord choice.

Nice work.
Andy

[Wicked Deeds]

Hello Paul

This is up to your usual standard and more.  I’ve said it before, i love your voice and writing style.  The drums sounds amazing.  A real bonus for me, i sth guitar - wonderful.  The chorus is so god. It’s very well developed from the full aspect of the production, to the stripped back middle section.  Demands our attention!  Very good lyrics my friend.

Paul

[moraamarolaloba]

Hola, hola, I loved it! A different song, despite being repetitive. The lyrics are very well developed and the voice has the necessary intensity, personality and swing. I think it is a great song. Hasta pronto. Mora

[PaulAds]

Thanks, everybody 

Couple of points to address...yeah, Andy...it’s basically the same chord progression for verse and chorus but it shifts up a semitone and then back down which I was very surprised to find worked quite well.

I re-recorded the vocals and re-mixed the track, making it a bit more energetic than it was at first...and there were a couple of timing issues on the guitar in the breakdown that I had to cut out. The bass playing in the verses is really sloppy when solo’d too. I was ashamed of myself...but I excused myself by pretending that it added to the disconcerting feel 

“Suicided” was - I think - a phrase coined by “The Corbett Report” which did a podcast series on journalists and others who were either driven to suicide, murdered and made to look like suicide, or died “accidentally” with nobody else to blame.

Cheers!

[PaulyX]

Yeah, I remember the earlier demo you posted too but it's moved on a lot... them drum loops were a good investment! The whole thing had more presence in this mix and I think you've elevated it from 'good song' to 'stonker' with this treatment. The tippex is still a bit of an anachronism for me but apart from that the lyrics are great - not too obvious and reward a careful listen. I wouldn't worry about the bassline either, that was another standout for me... a bit jerky, as befits a song influenced by those late 70s bands like the Jam. Top notch... Weller, Costello and the Feelgoods would be jealous.

[PaulAds]

Ha ha...cheers, Pauly...the tippex line is my favourite!

Life or death situations should always be a laptop/tablet/mobile free zone 

[Mikey]

Great song mate, lyrics are incisive, and the track is very Jam/Elvis Costello as pointed out in previous posts, and the vocal fits the style very well.

nice job, Mikey