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Need inspiration and help getting through writers block

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kieronfairhurst

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« Reply #45 on: November 28, 2017, 01:38:34 PM »
Yeah sure that sounds good. What about the other line? "I'll be with you through it all"

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Yodasdad

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« Reply #46 on: November 28, 2017, 02:27:43 PM »
Hi,

It wouldn't fit as well as 'we could crumble and fall'

It could replace 'we could crumble and fall' but it would mean two 'but's' in quick succession which doesn't sound great. I also think it sounds a little contradictory when followed by the line about if we stop talking.

I can try to get that in there as well if you really want it but I think it might spoil the flow of the section a little.

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kieronfairhurst

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« Reply #47 on: November 28, 2017, 04:39:51 PM »
Okay just leave it as it is then.

Also i dont think anyones responding to that feedback post. Dont know wether to bump it or not. If no one comments before tomorrow evening can get started on the process of producing the finished product if you want.

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Yodasdad

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« Reply #48 on: November 28, 2017, 06:32:04 PM »
Hi,

The other threads still at the top of the page so bumping it won't help.

People just aren't commenting.

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pompeyjazz

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« Reply #49 on: November 28, 2017, 10:33:45 PM »
I have been following this thread with a lot of interest as it's wonderful to see / hear a song being born. Usually all this discussion goes on privately but this has been illuminating with regard to how the process has worked in this instance. I'm sure the final song will be sensational and looking forward to hearing it  :)

kieronfairhurst

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« Reply #50 on: November 28, 2017, 11:43:49 PM »
I have been following this thread with a lot of interest as it's wonderful to see / hear a song being born. Usually all this discussion goes on privately but this has been illuminating with regard to how the process has worked in this instance. I'm sure the final song will be sensational and looking forward to hearing it  :)

Thanks and I'm sure it will be sensational when its finished :)

Speaking off, Yodasdad.. I don't think anyones comenting of the feedback thread. If you wanna get started with the producing the final thing you can now :)

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Yodasdad

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« Reply #51 on: November 29, 2017, 10:43:01 AM »
Kieron, will do.

Pompey, thanks man.

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« Reply #52 on: November 29, 2017, 10:59:46 AM »
Hi Kieron,

Just to clarify,

Did you want to go with

I'll lose the one I adore
Or
I'll love you forevermore
??

Both will work.

My preference is the first one as it leads straight into the chorus which has the word love in it and I think it's slightly less twee.

It's your call though so just let me know.

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kieronfairhurst

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« Reply #53 on: November 29, 2017, 11:29:51 AM »
Go with the first one "I adore".

Looking forward to hearing the final thing :)

K.