[EmmanuelT]

Here's a simple lyric I wrote! What do you guys think?
I imagine it going with a heartfelt country song.

''My New Leather Shoes''

I wonder what you'd think if you saw me in my new leather shoes?
Would you recognize me
Or see another?

I wonder what you'd say if you saw me in my new leather shoes?
"Have you grown
Or does those heels make you taller?"

I wonder how you'd act if you saw me in my new leather shoes?
Would you dance a last waltz with me in the moonlight hour?

Darling, I could polish my shoes all I want
But my feet would still look the same

[finestrat]

Not really enough content to comment on!!

[Vintage54]

    Howdy,
      Kicks off well, and i was just getting into the flow, when BOOM! it disappeared in a cloud of smoke. Could be something good with another verse or two my friend, just ends too abruptly.

                    Vintage54

[2tuoo]

I like the structure of this song, question and answer- couldn't be clearer

I'm a bit missing the part where shoes become some defining character while there are other parts of you that are still showing

on another hand - I'm not a good example, just looked at my shoes and apparently, there are orange stripes on them which I never noticed. I wear them daily for quite a while.