[Paulski]

Please don't ask me where the idea for this one came from...

The Turd That Got Left Behind

{ch}
His buddies went out in a rush
The paper went down with the flush
But he's left here for someone to find
The turd that got left behind

No-one saw before closing the lid
That he swam 'gainst the flow like he did
Should have joined all the others in line
But, that turd - he got left behind

His buddies went out in a rushsh
The paper went down with the flushsh
But he sits here for someone to find him
The turd that got left behind

His water's now clear as a stream
And he waits here for someone to see 'im
They could soon take him out of his bind
That turd that got left behind

His buddies went out in a rushshsh
The paper went down with the flushshsh
Now he's left here for someone to find him
The turd that got left behind

{br}
He's all smelly and brown
And just floating around
No relief from his stress
'til that handle is pressed...

So if you decide in this world
You're not fine going down in a swirl
You won't take that ride down to the sewer
The very next shite, you'll be losing that fight
Like the turd that got left behind

Yes, very next shite, you'll be losing that fight..
Like the turd that got left behind!

[Mikey]

Thats a load of crap!

Sorry, had to get that one in first, actually made me laugh so I'd like to hear it developed into a song.

Mikey

[CaliaMoko]

 

A fun one! Yay!

I like the extra "sh"es on the subsequent choruses. I won't ask you where you got the idea for the song (per your recommendation--besides, it seems obvious), but I might ask how you came up with the "shshsh" idea. ??

I have a couple thoughts. I'm wondering about the word "Now" at the beginning of two lines so close together. It's only twice, so doesn't seem like a big deal, but when I first read through the lyric and came upon the second "now", it jumped out at me and I felt like I had already seen it too many times. Maybe just me, though....

And the bridge is so uniformly rhythmical until the last line, that it also struck me. You probably already have a melody that smooths it out perfectly, but--just in case you don't--"till" might work in place of "Until".

I really can't wait to hear this....

Vicki

[Paulski]

Thats a load of crap!

Sorry, had to get that one in first, actually made me laugh so I'd like to hear it developed into a song.

Mikey

A load of crap? I resemble resent that remark! 
Don't know what genre, but I do want it to flow..

[Paulski]

A fun one! Yay!

I like the extra "sh"es on the subsequent choruses. I won't ask you where you got the idea for the song (per your recommendation--besides, it seems obvious), but I might ask how you came up with the "shshsh" idea. ??

I have a couple thoughts. I'm wondering about the word "Now" at the beginning of two lines so close together. It's only twice, so doesn't seem like a big deal, but when I first read through the lyric and came upon the second "now", it jumped out at me and I felt like I had already seen it too many times. Maybe just me, though....

And the bridge is so uniformly rhythmical until the last line, that it also struck me. You probably already have a melody that smooths it out perfectly, but--just in case you don't--"till" might work in place of "Until".

I really can't wait to hear this....

Vicki

Hi Vicky

Thanks for the comments.
I got the shshsh idea from listening to Herman's Hermits "A Kind of Hush" last week.
The repeating now - good catch - I'll fix that.
I originally had "'til" and you're right it should be til. Just wanted to point out that I originally had it and I was right in the first place etc etc.  

Thanks again for peeking in and finding smelly stuff.
It's good to flush these things out.  
Paul

[finestrat]

Could be a series, maybe the next one could be the ghost turd or disappearing turd, just a (weird) thought. 

[Skub]

This one needs the brown tone. 

[Vintage54]

   Paulski,
     I do believe you've gone right around the bend with this one. With a bit of chopping here and there, i can see this going down well. Thanks for making me smile.

                        Vintage54

[Paulski]

Well this one went down better than I thought it would 
Cheers all for commenting on this nasty business