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SFX

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« on: November 10, 2017, 02:14:54 PM »
Even the Devil wept for you
Crying molten rock cut from the moon
Because you were my whole world
But in time even galaxies dissolve

Even the Devil wept for me
Crying burnt charcoal as far as I can see
Because you were my burning flame
That fizzled out when the winds changed

And oh, can you hold me on this alter?
And oh, with a touch that never faulters?

Even the Devil wept for thee
On tears of his own faded mortality
Because we’re only human, mistakes are made
With no light in which our scars can fade

Even the Devil wept for us
Rubbing his eyes with shards of broken trust
Because I’m sharp but not sharp enough
To cut through these intangible handcuffs

And oh, can you hold me on this alter?
And oh, with a touch that never faulters?
And oh, would you drag me out of Hell?
And oh, if I promised not to dwell?

Even the Devil wept for you
Didn’t know what else to do
Evil can be easy to misconstrue
But even the Devil wept for you

nooms

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« Reply #1 on: November 10, 2017, 03:12:27 PM »
hi sfx

you are over posting mate.
you need to read the guidelines.
strictly speaking its one a fortnight.
in reality the lyric section is a little more flexible but..

http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?topic=2564.0
 





i may not believe this tomorrow...

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SFX

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« Reply #2 on: November 10, 2017, 03:18:47 PM »
oh, so thats why nobody ever posts, now i get it, how useless

nooms

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« Reply #3 on: November 10, 2017, 03:33:34 PM »
its not personal sfx, has to be that way tho to be fair to everyone, its a forum..

i may not believe this tomorrow...

https://soundcloud.com/nooms-1

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« Reply #4 on: November 10, 2017, 03:43:58 PM »
i know its not personal, but its still ridiculous, there isnt enough activity in this forum (certainly not this section) to justify that, nobody uses it , the only activity youve had in THREE DAYS is me and you telling me theres too much posting and people arent getting their fair share.. look around
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« Reply #5 on: November 11, 2017, 01:01:48 AM »

   Hey!
    I'm in your corner, no rules about how many songs to sing. Keep em coming, i love your work, and as far as i'm concerned, the more the merrier. At least you keep this section breathing.

                          Hats off
                               Vintage54

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« Reply #6 on: November 12, 2017, 05:40:16 AM »
Great song SFX!

I like this structure, the second questions part is bigger and this provides interesting instrumental opportunities.
Have a great day!

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« Reply #7 on: November 15, 2017, 11:55:29 AM »
Got to be heavy metal right?

SFX

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« Reply #8 on: November 15, 2017, 07:22:12 PM »
Got to be heavy metal right?

It's a ballad lol xD