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SFX

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« on: November 08, 2017, 02:26:13 PM »
New one, I just wrote it in about ten minutes, would love your feedback!

Tiptoes of shadows up fleeting stairs
Bogeyman was really there
You taught me trust is to abuse
And that monsters can cry too

You showed me how to love
And that nothing is ever enough
Flecks of rust down a deep dark hole
What’s life without total control?

Hit me, slap me- make me your bitch
Did what you had to do- gotta scratch that itch
And when my nerve endings start to twitch
You know you’re in
You know you’re in

You’re inside of me, in a place nobody else has been
You planted your seed, but all that grows from my fingertips are weeds
You made me bleed, and the ripples in my bloodstream made me see
I’ve never felt more at home than with you inside of me

All the people say I’m so strange
I’m just revelling in the pain
Dirty little secret and my lips are sealed
Of happiness I’m finally healed

You made me different to all of them
And that made me special or so you said
And now you can find me down the road of deceit
Nobody walks the walk better than me

Make me moan, break my bones- take your time
To feel your breath on my mind I have the rest of my life
And when memory and desire intertwine
I know you’re mine
I know you’re mine

You’re inside of me, in a place nobody else has been
You planted your seed, but all that grows from my fingertips are weeds
You made me bleed, and the ripples in my bloodstream made me see
I’ve never felt more at home than with you inside of me

I don’t know how to grow
Chains around my body growing tighter so
The more I learn, the less I care
About the fact life just ain’t fair
Even with love around me, I’m alone
Trying to reach the grave on my own
It’s sickening but it’s the truth
I belong to you and only you

You’re inside of me, in a place nobody else has been
You planted your seed, but all that grows from my fingertips are weeds
You made me bleed, and the ripples in my bloodstream made me see
I’ve never felt more at home than with you inside of me

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« Reply #1 on: November 08, 2017, 09:07:57 PM »

hi sfx
your lyrics are very welcome but one at a time please..
have a read of the guidelines
its so that everyone gets a fair share

cheers

i may not believe this tomorrow...

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« Reply #2 on: November 08, 2017, 10:10:32 PM »
great structure and great idea!

I think this might be a bit erotic, you know what I mean?


there is tons of words in this song, what style and tempo you intend to use on it?
Have a great day!

SFX

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« Reply #3 on: November 08, 2017, 10:16:02 PM »
I suppose it is erotic, but i'm interested to see if anyone picks up the true meaning of the song!

It's like mid-tempo to fast

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« Reply #4 on: November 23, 2017, 06:01:13 PM »
Hi SFX,
           it's not about a dildo is it?,calm down i'm only joking.
I've been reading the lyrics to your last few songs and i love them,
there's obviously a lot of eroticism in your lyrics but they're reading
like rock n roll to me,bring on the next one,
                                                                Tom.

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« Reply #5 on: November 23, 2017, 10:42:54 PM »
hey SFX,

are we going to see one of those in the music review sections?

I'd love to know your style
Have a great day!

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« Reply #6 on: November 27, 2017, 07:26:28 PM »
I'm thinking it's an intravenous drug although some lines don't match that theory. Third Eye Blind did a less violent version called "Deep Inside of You".

 Perhaps it is about depression.

It goes perfectly with the book "Warbreaker".
« Last Edit: November 28, 2017, 01:39:41 AM by Fellswell »

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« Reply #7 on: November 28, 2017, 01:07:01 AM »
This is very good but also very dark if it's about what I think it is.

I'm getting child abuse, peadophillia, incest??

And the way that it alters and screws people up for life and I'm getting a sense that your saying it can create a love hate type of relationship and warped dependency.

If I'm right I'd be interested in how this one plays out into a finished song.

Yodasdad