Hi, this is first song that I have written, and I feel the bridges could be greatly improved and hoping to get some suggestions or even suggestions for the rest of the song.
Thanx in advance!!
Verse 1
Where did it all go wrong?
I've missed you for so long.
Since you been laid to rest,
I've come to treasure
The time we had together.
As the hour begins to get late
You'll not have long to wait.
Bridge 1
I never understood the meaning of paradise
But then I came to realise.
That all I ever wanted
I had with you.
Chorus
Everytime I visit your stone, I feel so alone.
My life has become so broken
That I'm scared you'll be forgotten
And I ask him why, when I think of you,
High above the Sky
Verse 2
I close my eyes to see,
You smiling back at me.
I wish for that the most
Just to see your ghost.
Now that we've been separated
I dream for my soul to be liberated.
Bridge 2
I'm missing a part of me
You were my universe
You were more than I'm worth
How I wish to be free from this curse
Chorus
Everytime I visit your stone, I feel so alone.
My life has become so broken
That I'm scared you'll be forgotten
And I ask him why, when I think of you,
High above the Sky
My life has been destroyed
As I'm slipping into this void.
And I ask him why, when I think of you,
High above the Sky
Verse 3
I plead with thee
That you'll wait for me.
Now I lay beside your grave
It's your touch that I crave.
As the flowers begin to bloom
I'll be with you soon.
