Cornflower Blue (Collab with Neil C)

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« on: November 01, 2017, 04:42:16 PM »
Hi peeps,

This is a new song I wrote about a beautiful but fleeting relationship. I sent Neil my vocal with a simple finger picked acoustic guitar accompaniment and this came back a few days later. I was blown away. Harmony vocals by my wife, Janine.

I hope you like it and feel the urge to comment.

https://soundcloud.com/alan-walker-4/cornflower-blue

Cornflower Blue

Goodbye my Cornflower Blue
A free bird that flew
You sang for a while
In my garden

Goodluck my Cornflower Blue
Our days were few
But your taste's stiil sweet
On my tongue

You hated the chains
And the cold northern rain
You wanted sun on your face
In the morning

The skies were Cornflower Blue
When our love was new
Like the bright silver dew
Of September

Your eyes of Cornflower Blue
Are the deepest hue
Like the endless roll
Of the ocean

Go ahead and chase your dreams
Even when it seems
They're fading faster than you run

I loved you Cornflower Blue
I always knew
You'd carry no blame
For this leaving

I called you Cornflower Blue
You were just passing through
I was only a town
On your journey

Goodbye Cornflower Blue
A free bird that flew
You sang for a while
In my garden

© Alan Walker 2017






« Last Edit: November 01, 2017, 04:51:06 PM by montydog »

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« Reply #1 on: November 01, 2017, 04:53:11 PM »
Simply beautiful Alan. A great production Neil. Well done chaps :-)

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« Reply #2 on: November 01, 2017, 05:07:03 PM »
Hey Alan, this is very beautiful. I like how you captured that country mood and musical style, which fits the subject matter just perfectly. Nice country bass. Great playing and production, too.

The bridge came in at just the right moment and gave a nice shift in the structure of the song, and then the solo added just the right amount of spice.

Good job everyone!

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« Reply #3 on: November 01, 2017, 09:02:17 PM »
Yo Alan.

What a lovely song.

Poignant and nostalgic lyrics are brought to life by a memorable melody.

Great backing vocals and harmonies from Janine give a further polish to the song.

Fine playing and mixing from Neil.  :)

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« Reply #4 on: November 02, 2017, 04:45:46 PM »
mmhhh;

soothing beautiful; a classic; really enjoyed the production as well.

the arrangement is perfect; like the small variations in the drum section; of course the doubled vocals and strings and guitars and lyrics and the singing

it s really very good in my ears.

ty

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« Reply #5 on: November 02, 2017, 04:56:51 PM »
Defo got the urge to comment..thought it was a very gentle and beautiful track..Neil did a really fab job!! :)
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« Reply #6 on: November 02, 2017, 08:55:26 PM »
Very nice, I don't know what genre this is, but who cares, it's got a hint of country, I'll just call it Monty music.

Nice and relaxed but lyrically engaging. The slow one syllable to a beat preceding cornflower each time is very effective.

Hats off to Mrs dog Monty, that sounds better, harmonies blended nicely.

Guitar, yep that was good to.

Okay, well it seems all was good then, my job here is done.

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« Last Edit: November 02, 2017, 09:19:18 PM by Yodasdad »

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« Reply #7 on: November 02, 2017, 09:12:45 PM »
I concur with all of the above. This song feels just wonderful. A timeless classic indeed, with beautiful words. A grand job, team. :)
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« Reply #8 on: November 02, 2017, 10:18:23 PM »
Dude are you saying you had a relationship with a bird in your garden? And you licked it??
That's pretty weird but I like weird so that's cool, ok.
Man this is uber catchy, and I wish it wasn't y'know because it's not my music at all. It's my old man's music and I hope you understand I can't be caught singing that stuff.
Great voice man, you ever thought of cranking it up and doing rock? You could do it man.
« Last Edit: November 02, 2017, 10:21:29 PM by Silver Machine »

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« Reply #9 on: November 02, 2017, 10:43:26 PM »
Mellow little song man. Conjures up vibest of the summer of  76  :) So well produced and arranged. Nice one

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« Reply #10 on: November 03, 2017, 12:42:01 AM »
Well, there's Nov SOTM all sewn up and it's only the 2nd  ;D
Lots to like here. Excellent lyrics.
Silky vocals and harmonies, lovely instrumentation and polish.
Love the little half bar before each verse and how the hook is on every first line.
Oh, and perfect length!!

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« Reply #11 on: November 05, 2017, 03:59:08 PM »
Hi forum mates,

Just a little bump(!) to thank all those who commented on this. I think this is probably the first song I've posted on the forum where there were no nits and the one that sank quickest (bloody competition entries  ::) )

So thumbs up and hugs to Paulski, Pompeyjazz, Silver Machine, Wicked Deeds, Cazrolina, Yodasdad, shadowfax, Skub, Wolfini and The Butcher and most of all to Neil Connor for bringing my little song to life.

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Well, there's Nov SOTM all sewn up and it's only the 2nd  ;D
Lots to like here. Excellent lyrics.
Silky vocals and harmonies, lovely instrumentation and polish.
Love the little half bar before each verse and how the hook is on every first line.
Oh, and perfect length!!

Paul

Mellow little song man. Conjures up vibest of the summer of  76  :) So well produced and arranged. Nice one
Dude are you saying you had a relationship with a bird in your garden? And you licked it??
That's pretty weird but I like weird so that's cool, ok.
Man this is uber catchy, and I wish it wasn't y'know because it's not my music at all. It's my old man's music and I hope you understand I can't be caught singing that stuff.
Great voice man, you ever thought of cranking it up and doing rock? You could do it man.
Simply beautiful Alan. A great production Neil. Well done chaps :-)
I concur with all of the above. This song feels just wonderful. A timeless classic indeed, with beautiful words. A grand job, team. :)
Very nice, I don't know what genre this is, but who cares, it's got a hint of country, I'll just call it Monty music.

Nice and relaxed but lyrically engaging. The slow one syllable to a beat preceding cornflower each time is very effective.

Hats off to Mrs dog Monty, that sounds better, harmonies blended nicely.

Guitar, yep that was good to.

Okay, well it seems all was good then, my job here is done.

Yodasdad
Defo got the urge to comment..thought it was a very gentle and beautiful track..Neil did a really fab job!! :)
mmhhh;

soothing beautiful; a classic; really enjoyed the production as well.

the arrangement is perfect; like the small variations in the drum section; of course the doubled vocals and strings and guitars and lyrics and the singing

it s really very good in my ears.

ty

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Yo Alan.

What a lovely song.

Poignant and nostalgic lyrics are brought to life by a memorable melody.

Great backing vocals and harmonies from Janine give a further polish to the song.

Fine playing and mixing from Neil.  :)
Hey Alan, this is very beautiful. I like how you captured that country mood and musical style, which fits the subject matter just perfectly. Nice country bass. Great playing and production, too.

The bridge came in at just the right moment and gave a nice shift in the structure of the song, and then the solo added just the right amount of spice.

Good job everyone!

Bye Wolfi

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« Reply #12 on: November 09, 2017, 07:22:45 AM »
Thanks for the feedback everyone.
Its different being responsible for working on someone elses tune rather than your own. I really enjoyed putting a delicate arrangment around Alans lovely tune, all topped off by their top vocals.
 :)
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« Reply #13 on: November 09, 2017, 11:04:11 AM »
This is so good! Everything works in it and supports other parts.

That song is so sad, it's a romantic one but I got distracted mid listening and missed some parts and on the first listen it made me think about letting your kids go into the world. Then I listened again and there we go, another string struck.


The whole mix sits exactly right!

BTW - you had 666 followers, sorry, I ruined it :)
Have a great day!

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« Reply #14 on: November 09, 2017, 01:19:41 PM »
Everything sounding really good here - BVs in particular give it a roundness and fullness which feels great. I like the way you keep the metaphor going all through so it could really be about a bird but we all imagine it's not.

Every now and then I thought a dramatic pause before the Cornflower Blue lines could add something poignant and let the previous line sink in but who knows, it's beautiful as is.