[adamfarr]

So here we go with my dark-ish song, written, recorded and produced in record time. The protagonist is a manipulative pick up artist who starts to question himself and his acts. The original "guru" of pick up artists, Mystery, even makes an appearance ...

The best thing about competitions is that they can spur us on to do different things in different ways from what we're used to. Some might say that's the worst thing about competitions too... So here's something unlike most things I've ever created or that you've probably heard before. Happy to get your comments as always!


Forsaking the Game
https://soundcloud.com/lutehill/forsaking-the-game-master-30-10-2017d

CH
Like a spider, I spin webs round me
I make you fantasize
But in the hindsight of the daylight
Will we find those lies weren't white?

V1.
When I strut up, there's no ifs and buts
I'm a butterfly you can't help but trust
With my peacock hat, my pre-prepared chat
My practised tactics get the bases stacked
Time to attack, I lean away from the pack
Just enough to make you want to drag me back

CH

V2.
I take you out of the bar, and into my car  
To places that demonstrate how great my taste is
You see an oasis, but I’m playing space invaders
In my starlit starship you feel like a starlet
In a true movie, you're never losing
Still assuming it’s you who’s doing the choosing

CH

V3.
Greedily stealing what I can reach easily
But what about meeting the real needs deep in me
I occasionally ache for a break from the fakery
And you could be capable of making me waver
But I ain’t persuaded to make any changes
'Cos staying with you would mean
Forsaking the Game

FINAL CHs

(c) Adam Farr, 2017, all rights reserved

[PaulyX]

That's a really unique combination of influences Adam... very novel and defies categorisation. I dug the lyrics but couldn't really work out what it is about - perhaps the sampled voices near the end give us a clue? Nice rapping too sir, I liked the pauses that came in unexpected places - thought they added to the off kilter nature of it. The percussion was the other standout for me here... nice crispy beats that carry the whole thing very well. Good luck in the game!

[Yodasdad]

Nice work, a real fusion of influences there and not at all what the acoustic guitar intro suggested the song was going to be.

My only suggestion would be that I think the mix needs a little looking at. Might just be my ears but the drums, particularly the snare were coming through quite loud and harsh to me.

Other than that I've got no complaints here.

Yodasdad

[Skub]

Yo Adam.

A very adventurous concept overall.

Lyrically very clever,a great picture of a man stuck in his ways and plumbing new depths of shallowness,a slave to his own game. A player.

Kudos to you for the rap parts,I'm of an age where that would be unthinkable! 

It's dark inasmuch as it is introspective and a bit melancholy.

I agree with Sickboi McYoda on the tweaking the mix.

[pompeyjazz]

Wah ! Different from you Adam and great respect.  I love the groove and the Adam rap is something else. I think it works really well. It's such a fusion that it defies category definition which is pretty damn good in my book.  As usual your lyrics are well thought out, quirky and different. Excellent 

[crystalsuzy]

Who would have guessed you could rap Adam! And you rapped very well in this song, with the pauses and all I agree, that the good thing about these comps is that people step outside their comfort zones and try something new, as you certainly did   Your lyrics are clever and very quirky indeed. I thought your vocals could have been a little more upfront, especially in the choruses, but they were very good. Great drumming groove going on, but maybe a little too harsh
Good luck in the comp  

[mickyplankton]

This is excellent Adam. Love the fusion of styles. A bit of Hip Hop, bit of Rap. And a killer guitar hook thrown in too. Lyrically its a little obtuse but in a cool way. Really impressed youve knocked this out so quickly.

Where did you get the musical inspiration from?

[montydog]

Oh boy! That intro was most misleading. This was not my thing at all and I bloody hate rapping so this kind of out weighed the positives like the clever lyrics and original production ideas. Good in parts but from a personal taste point of view, not my favourite of yours. Sorry.

M

[Wicked Deeds]

Lovely guitar intro.

Great contrasting sections. I'd love to hear an alternative production that would really demonstrate how cool this is. At the moment, the drums make this very difficult to listen to comfortably but I can hear an abundance of ideas and originality.

Quality song

Paul

[Wolfini]

I think this worked out quite nicely. I am not a big fan of rap, but here you pulled me into the groove and I was happily bouncing along with it. The electronic drums worked surprisingly well here.

Good and clear lyrics.

My only nit would be that I felt the vocals in the verse were too loud and in the chorus too low - easy enough to fix probably but it probably also depends on the listening system as usual.

Very unique and interesting entry for the comp, good luck!

Bye Wolfi

[PaulAds]

You did a great job here, Adam...I think your vocal (including the rap) is as good as anything you've done. Lyrics are very smart, as always...and it's a great, cynical take on the seemingly endlessly enduring appeal of the complete tosser.

Lovely acoustic guitar playing and that's a really great chorus. I think you've pulled a cracker out of the bag.

Good luck in the competition 

[TheButcher]

the acoustic guitar is great.

honestly; to me, the mixture of acoustic guitar, singing, rap? and especially the harsh electronic beat doesn't work.
i really respect the attempt; but especially the beat needs a more soft sound i think.

sorry.

all the best

B

[digger72]

Hi Adam,

Lovely guitar intro. Works well with the percussive idea.
I just found the electronic "snare" like sound a bit too harsh and intrusive.
The kick pulse provides a nice beat and perhaps should be the emphasis alongside the vocal.

Interesting vocal style.
Cool lyrics.

Digger

[shadowfax]

oooeerr you caught me out with the intro and blimey ..what an eclectic mix this is!!
not a fan of rap at all I'm afraid
some interesting Elizabethan type harmonies goin on and this is defo an original song my friend
perc is a bit ear shattering though...

very good lyrics...

[Paulski]

Adam!

Two songs from separate genres in one!
You messen wit me 'ed bro!
I liked the elec RAP song (tone that snare down though  )
I also liked the acoustic guitar song - sweet.
There - you have two reviews for the price of one 

Brave!
Paul