[2tuoo]

This one was written after visiting a beautiful wooden cabin up north,
I imagined what would it feel like to the person who invested thought, sweat, and blood into building such a beauty when it betrays you.

do you think I captured the mood right?
Read this in romantic/ballad style

Pre-song:
(sound of hammer on wood, then Yelp)

V1:
Do you remember the days of glory
Free of distress and free of worry?
You could send love and share your a thought
But with thumb swollen, you cannot

Pre-chorus 1:
You could take selfies and click send
Troll away and poke a friend

Chorus:
And now can’t feel what’s left what’s right
Cannot engage in flaming fight
Can’t spill your heart in Serenade
Your social life is at its end

V2:
What’s worth the sound of bird’s song
If you cannot hold rec for long
Your wit was lyrics now it’s prose
For thumb is no match for your nose

Pre-chorus 2:
You swipe and tap, your left-hand tense
Your friends believe you're someone else

Chorus:
And now can’t feel what’s left what’s right
Cannot engage in flaming fight
Can’t spill your heart in Serenade
Your social life is at its end

[CaliaMoko]

Oh yeah, a message song! Love it!

When reading the chorus, my brain wanted to end it, "Your social life drifted away".

I didn't understand the line, "For thumb is no match for your nose". Probably because I can only understand plain and simple language. I'm not good with metaphors or vague references at all.

I definitely want to hear how this sounds when set to music. I'll be waiting for that.

Vicki

[2tuoo]

Hi Vicki,

the line is not a metaphor at all

Perhaps it will be clearer if I change it to "for thumb is better than your nose" or to "Thumb typing better than with nose"

[CaliaMoko]

OooooOOOOooooooh! Don't change it based on my reaction, though. As I said, most people "get" things better and easier than I do. I'm probably the only person who didn't understand what that meant. Now it seems obvious. 

[Mikey]

I don't usually comment on lyrics as I prefer to hear them in the song, but the humour in your lyrics always seems to make me smile, I love the irony that you are commenting about social media on an internet forum, great stuff.

Can't wait to hear the finished track, Mikey