[Paulski]

Finally got around to using this lyric.
It's been moaning in my closet for awhile now.  
Any and all comments are welcome  

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/dirty-money

Dirty Money

Something shifted in the packet
When he took it from the man
Something bristled through his fingers
When he held it in his hands
Something slithered from the dark
And crawled into his heart

Dirty money

He resolved himself to never
Tell a soul where it was from
He'd be careful not to flaunt it
Yet, "who were they to judge?"
But hidden in his closet
Those earnings had become

Dirty money
How it grinned!
He didn't own it
It owned him

Always haunting, always moaning
Like a harbinger of death
Always wanting, always groaning
From its muffled place it wept
Like those people in the truck
He so wished he could forget

Dirty money
How it grinned
He didn't own it
It owned him

No syringe could ever purge
That image from his head
Having slid that van door open
To those faces of the dead
And to know his greed had led
to..

Dirty money

In the bathtub where they found him
Wrists forsaken by a blade
Ben Franklins sailed around
A sea of pink lemonade
His conscience had him tried for
And sentenced him to die for

Dirty money
How it grinned
He didn't own it
It owned him
It owned him.

[Wolfini]

Definitely different for you. The music made my hair stand up, well at least what's left of it. Very interesting arrangement ideas. Great vocals, maybe even a bit too pretty for the subject matter.

Great lyrics, a story well told.

Bye Wi-Fi

[shadowfax]

What a fab piece of work from you!! very theatrical, clever arrangement and,  as usual, clever lyrics..
and vocally your really give it the beans!

fine job Paul...

[Yodasdad]

Very infectious!

I was expecting something largely piano driven, which you do so well, so it was quite a surprise.

Really like the strings hook on the chorus, actually no I don't because I can't get the damn thing out of my head now.

Lyrically creative as usual and hats off to you for being able to make effective use of a slap bass patch, I've never managed it.

Good stuff Paul.

Yodasdad

[Wicked Deeds]

What a screamer!  Power in abundance. I'm not sure the mix is quite right but all of the ingredients are here to convey exactly your intentions. Fine lyrics too.  This is absolute quality!

Well done,

Paul

[Martinswede]

Good song! A bit crowded with instruments maybe. Great lyrics.

[ScottLevi]

Hey Paul,

These are some of the most compelling lyrics so far in my opinion; very cool, very smart, and definitely dark!

Really moves along nicely as a story and such a cool, twisted subject matter.

I was really hoping for some awesome music and vocals to do them justice, and damn right! Listened to the intro a few times before the rest of the song - just because it's awesome - vocals drop in so powerfully and that groovy guitar is ace!

It's rich for me to comment but I agree the mix doesn't feel quite right, which is a shame given all the components and the arrangement are absolutely fantastic and enthralling.

Anyway voting must start soon right.. jesus this'll be a tough one!

Thanks for sharing!

Cheers,
Scott.

[CaliaMoko]

Oh my! A truly worthy contender. I can't even sing some of those intervals! So on edge. And such clever lyrics. The musical setting is uncomfortable, makes me kind of squirm. Really excellent. I predict this will do well in the challenge.

[PaulyX]

Veeery dramatic / cinematic Paulski. That descending strings motif is the kind of thing someone will sample and rap over in years to come. I really liked the combination of that with the steely sounding acoustic picking. Middle 8 break down was great too. Mix sounded ok to me, I only wasn't sure about the spoken vocals slightly out of time with the sung vocals towards the end, found them a bit distracting. Great song though and something a bit different from you, it's bound to do really well in the comp.

[diademgrove]

Hi Paul,

great song reminded me of The Levellers, definitely a good thing.

Good luck in the competition,

Keith

[adamfarr]

A feast of fusion - quite prog rock in parts, those strings sound almost like you did sample them from somewhere. I think for me the one thing that didn't really 100% fit was the dirty electric guitar - the high one was fine and most everything else. Great vocal performance. Love the flashbacks in the lyrics - the people in the truck is fabulous. I have to confess I had to look up what a Ben Fanklin was but then I don't get out much...

Great piece of work!

[crystalsuzy]

WOW<Paul! This is so different from what I've come to know and love from you, but I love this track as well It's just so darn dramatic, and what a great dark subject matter! I love how the song builds, and that screaming guitar solo is fantastic! Clever lyrics and great vocals! Good luck! 

[PaulAds]

Wow, Mr Paulski 

Yeah...it’s amazing how this is so obviously you...despite being totally different from almost everything else I’ve heard from you...amazing.

Lyric, story, sentiment and vocals are absolutely top banana and that lead guitar is really excellent too.

A definite contender for the title, I reckon 

[Skub]

Yo Paulski.

Hey man,this is a bit of a change of direction for you and I must say I approve. 

With your choirboy vocals contrasting with the rocky backdrop,it reminded me of Greg Lake and his time with King Crimson,also bits of Jack Bruce vocals (Cream era) in there too.

It's a great storyline,well told of how conscience catches up with some folk and they become their own judge,jury and executioner.

Rawk on brother. 

[moraamarolaloba]

Very different and the arrangements very well applied, the voices great, what more? The lyrics... A novel in those words. See you Paul