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Sing Us Both To Heaven
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igg
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Sing Us Both To Heaven
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October 03, 2017, 06:54:10 PM »
Something I wrote a few months ago........Any reactions bad or good??? Thanks!!
Sing Us Both To Heaven
Well, you're a thief and I'm a beggar
Circling round this love together
Each one taking more than we could give
Those willing hearts that we once plundered
Are broken now...they pull us under
And we have both forgotten how to live
Chorus:
And if I could
I would wrap us up in my guitar
And sing us both to heaven
I'd sing us both
All the way to heaven
I'm showing kings but you've got aces
Time to pack our sad suitcases
Every day's a hand that we should fold
We bet on love in all its glory
Believing all our made up stories
But all we did was just keep growing old
Chorus:
And if I could
I would wrap us up in my guitar
And sing us both to heaven
I'd sing us both
All the way to heaven
Bridge
This avalanche of might have beens
Has buried us alive
How many times has love come round
And not been recognized
Though we thought we'd surely win...
We didn't do so well
Thinking that we'd both found heaven....
We stumbled into hell
Chorus:
And if I could
I would wrap us up in my guitar
And sing us both to heaven
I'd sing us both
All the way to heaven
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PaulAds
Stadium Tour
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Haemorrhaging Enthusiasm
Re: Sing Us Both To Heaven
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October 03, 2017, 07:08:45 PM »
Hey igg...great to hear from you again
This is super...you always produce great stuff.
Lots of great lines...and it reads like music already...I love it!
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Arkwright
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Re: Sing Us Both To Heaven
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October 03, 2017, 07:39:56 PM »
Outstanding piece of writing, I wouldn't change a thing...
The bridge is a killer.
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Paulski
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Re: Sing Us Both To Heaven
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October 05, 2017, 06:04:45 PM »
Well done igg - up to your usual standards.
You could almost name it Sing Us To Heaven as the "Both" seems a bit redundant to me.
Paul
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hardtwistmusic
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Re: Sing Us Both To Heaven
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October 06, 2017, 07:20:14 PM »
Good to hear from you again. This was top notch. . . and it sang easily and well on first read.
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igg
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Re: Sing Us Both To Heaven
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October 08, 2017, 07:41:41 PM »
Hi Guys.....
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment....I really appreciate it!
Paul
- Great to hear from you.....You are a source of great inspiration for me....!
Steve
- You are far, far too kind.... I'm glad that the lyrics connected with your experience....Thanks..
Paul
- Thanks for the comment....I think that I agree with the direction of your insight....perhaps I'll change the chorus to
And if I could
I would wrap us up in my guitar
And sing us both to heaven
I'd would sing us...
All the way to heaven
Whadda ya think?
Verlon
-Thanks for the compliment....and great to connect with you as well....I really try to get the internal rhythms aligned as well as I can....
Igg
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Vintage54
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Re: Sing Us Both To Heaven
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October 18, 2017, 10:00:38 PM »
Howdy igg,
The verses and the bridge are just terrific, top quality writing. Oddly enough, i don't think the chorus is of the same standard. though "Sing us both to Heaven" is a great title. Having said that, still damn good.
Vintage54
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