Civil War Letters

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Vintage54

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« on: October 28, 2017, 09:30:14 PM »

    Greetings everyone. Had the idea for this one in my head for some time,
    but never got around to it. About four days ago i decided to knuckle down
    and get it done, so here it is. I don't know if anyone has come up with
    something similar before me, but if that's the case, no theft was intended.

                                 Civil War Letters

                    My Dear,
                          I hope this letter finds you well
                          It's been a while since last i heard from you
                          They say, the mail was stalled in Memphis
                          Only now has it been getting through
                          Since i wrote you last we've been in battle
                          "Magnolia Hills" a glorious victory won
                          And though good men were falling all around me
                          The Lord saw fit to spare your darling John
                          All day long those southern boys denied us
                          Not till nightfall did they finally yield
                          The flower that i send you with this letter
                          Was plucked like courage from the battlefield
                          Now our boots are on the road to Vicksburg
                          Marching neath the tattered stars and bars
                          Before these words i write will ever reach you
                          The flag above that city will be ours
                          God is on our side so don't be anxious
                          Don't fear for me, don't you worry none
                          I'll hold you in my arms when it's all over

                                             Forever Yours
                                               Your loving husband
                                                     John.

                     My Love,
                          When i received your letter
                          I felt the eyes of God had looked my way
                          And answered all the prayers that i'd been sending
                          I feared the worst with every passing day
                          Knowing that you're safe my soul is lifted
                          As one upon some dark and stormy night
                          When the heavy clouds have finally shifted
                          And the solitary Moon reveals it's light
                          I miss those mornings waking up beside you
                          That farewell kiss now seems so long ago
                          It's hard knowing the shells burst all around you
                          While here the peaceful springtime waters flow
                          In the streets the flags are proudly waving
                          In every church the hopeful candle's burn
                          "Old red"  sits for hours by the roadside
                          Waiting for his master to return
                          The love i have for you will never falter
                          You and i together are one breath
                          May the grace of God continue to protect you

                                                 Forever in my thoughts
                                                        Your darling
                                                              Beth.

                    Dear Madam,
                          It pains me to inform you
                          While engaged in battle in this awful war
                          Your brave and noble husband in his duty
                          Received a fatal wound and is no more
                          If there's any consolation at this hour
                          No suffering was felt at his demise
                          His passing was both dignified and peaceful
                          When the fire was extinguished in his eyes
                          Your captain was a man with great compassion
                          For his own men and the enemy
                          One day i heard him say "Despite the difference
                          Johnny Reb sure looks a lot like me"
                          His one request if he should fall in battle
                          Was to send his body home to you somehow
                          Rest assured, i will fulfill that obligation
                          As soon as circumstances here allow
                          Enclosed, are the letters that you wrote him
                          And the band of gold that proudly bears your name
                          May god give you the strength to come through this

                                                      His friend
                                                        Lieutenant-Colonel
                                                            Henry Kane.


                                           Vintage54




PaulyX

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« Reply #1 on: October 28, 2017, 10:35:33 PM »
I don't know much about the civil war, but this feels superbly crafted to me.  The letters read quite naturally yet still work poetically. I can imagine this being a real heart-breaker with some music put to it. Well done on writing something with such an ambitious, constraining structure to it. Very clever.
It's all too beautiful.

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« Reply #2 on: October 29, 2017, 09:25:53 AM »
Great piece of art! The depth of it!

It was hard for me to read it without hearing Eminem's "Stan" in my head, I'm sure this is not the only way to read it.

Are there any reference songs in this style? I really want to know how this works with music
Have a great day!

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« Reply #3 on: October 29, 2017, 05:59:19 PM »
As Paulyx said, this flows so well, both as letters and as a lyric. It brought the tears to my eyes. I hope to hear it set to music eventually.

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« Reply #4 on: October 30, 2017, 12:07:44 AM »
Good stuff Vintage.
You've really made us connect to the two - husband and wife and their precarious circumstances. Your word-smithing is impecable as usual.
My only nit is you leave us emotionally hanging.  :( :(
Maybe a final letter from his son/daughter or from his wife when she received the body?

Well done - great creative concept  ;D
Paul
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