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Read October 07, 2017, 08:25:39 PM #0
Silver Machine

Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Hi beautiful ones, it's Silver Machine.
Peeps I was in the laboratory the other day with my man Stevie Ray Hawking.
Hey Silver Dude, he voiced, Does you think guitars have a place in the cosmology of Dance Music?
Hey good question Stevie! Ok let's find out!!

https://clyp.it/l0mv2rhn

Lyrics:

In my country we have music for attracting womens, & also music for repelling vermins.
Every year the top songs in each category receive a prestigious award.
Of course there is  substantial entry fee for each song.
This year to cut down cost, I prepare a single combined entry for both category.

I love you, beautiful womans
I love you, beautiful womans
I love you, beautiful womans
I love you, beautiful womans

RELEASE THE GIANT CATS!

I love you, beautiful womans
I love you, beautiful womans
I will buy you magnificent  mouse traps
I will buy you the finest rat poison
I will be your mouse exterminator!
I will be your superhero mouse exterminator!

RELEASE THE GIANT CATS!

Sexy lady, you can be rodent free.
Make love to me
Sexy lady, you can be rodent free
Come with me.
« Last Edit: October 07, 2017, 08:30:41 PM by Silver Machine »
 
Read October 07, 2017, 09:39:36 PM #1
pompeyjazz

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Did what it said on the tin. Killed all rodents and sexy ladies within a 2 km radius of the listening position. Wonderful creative stuff man  Smiley
 
Read October 07, 2017, 11:29:41 PM #2
redrhodie

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Love the guitars and lyrics. I didn't get the synthesizers until the guitar came in, then it made perfect sense. Great song. Made me laugh.


Life is just a dream.
 
Read October 08, 2017, 01:16:22 AM #3
CaliaMoko

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Due to my advanced age, this sounds like it needs to have a strobe light flashing away while it plays. Very creative! No nits from me.
 
Read October 08, 2017, 07:28:07 PM #4
PaulyX

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

You know what, this time I could do without the mental guitars.  The combination of cheesey 80s disco synth with lyrics about being "rodent free" is gorgeous and weird enough mate, without the thrash-guitar and alternative-time-signature incoming missiles interrupting the boogie.  Can we have a mix without the "Release the Giant Cats" bits?  Or give the cats their own separate song?
None the less, another piece of wacko genius.


It's all too beautiful.
 
Read October 08, 2017, 07:32:37 PM #5
mickyplankton

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Hey Silver Machine. You've certainly made a big impression in a short space of time here. i enjoyed your first two "experiments". This one is several orders of magnitude more evolved and demonstrates songwriting craft and musicianship as well as that totally off the wall signature of yours. I'd love to hear this in a nightclub, not that I go clubbing anymore, but I would if you were the DJ.
Great to have such a unique songwriter on the forum. Hope you stick around. Micky.
 
Read October 08, 2017, 07:48:55 PM #6
Morefrog Jones

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Mental  Grin - But i get the humour and you certainly cannot ignore something like this. Great fun.
 
Read October 09, 2017, 12:21:19 PM #7
adamfarr

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Another enjoyable visit to the well of ideas that would never occur to me!

I'm probably missing the point, but I did wonder whether it might be more effective to make the two elements merge seamlessly together so that we think we are listening to a love song but actually hearing about vermin. Or the other way round. Or both. Or... (Mind into overdrive)
 
Read October 09, 2017, 01:21:32 PM #8
skogge

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

I can hear that you are having great fun. So did I actually. World needs more creative, wacko-positivium great fun. Yup.
 
Read October 09, 2017, 04:33:21 PM #9
Cawproductions

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Duuuuude,

There I am chilling back with a beer listening about sexy ladies then at 39 secs, BOOOM, my face gets ripped off.
I am like WTF....then it drops back.....Love it...No one is doing this

Its experimental but after a few listens...am waiting for it....

Good work chap.
 
Read October 09, 2017, 09:19:23 PM #10
Skub

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Barry white meets Eurotrash,meets 21st Century Schizoid man.

A montage of mayhem and madness midst the oasis of synth.  Cool
 
Read October 12, 2017, 09:59:53 AM #11
PaulAds

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Holy shit, Silver Man  Shocked

This is an absolute riot...I really enjoyed it!

With a great groove underneath it and some real fun lyrics too.

A winner!


heart of stone, feet of clay, knob of butter
 
Read October 14, 2017, 09:23:06 AM #12
diademgrove

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Hi Silver Machine,

I agree with PaulyX, it would be a much better without the guitar. Other than that it was way too short. I wanted at least 5 minutes, maybe more. Definitely made my morning.

I hope to hear a lot more from you in the future.

Keith
 
Read October 14, 2017, 07:41:53 PM #13
Silver Machine

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Peeps  I thank you all for the luxurious comments. 

PaulyX  + diademgrove - Guys you cannot have this without the mental guitars.  There is no song without the two parts!  Hey, anyway too much synth is bad for your virility, while guitar increases your testosterone. You do know that dont you? You guys need to up your daily guitar intake, thats for sure.

MickeyPlankton- I dont appear in nightclubs, but if I did and you went to them again, and I played this song, and you heard it, I would buy you a beer, or drugs if you prefer.  Huge compliment , man.

CAW Productions - Yeah the WTF moments are what my songs are all about. Dont ever freebase and listen to my songs, you will incinerate yourself.
 
Read October 14, 2017, 08:23:14 PM #14
skogge

Re: Sexy Lady You Can Be Rodent Free!

Hey, anyway too much synth is bad for your virility

Say again!?

 Wink
 
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