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Read October 10, 2017, 09:29:00 AM #15
skogge

Re: Janee

Lovely little tune. Nice melodi and a pleasant voice/delivery.
Since I am such a lo-fi / DIY-pop lover I love this. Dunno what will happen if you polish it though? Maybe better, but better for me? Smiley
I love the off-beat drums, not really sure about the chorused guitar, maybe I would have wanted the vocals a little more in my face / breathy because they at times feels a bit distant.
But hey, it makes me happy and grows a smile on my face.
What more can you ask for in a song?
« Last Edit: October 11, 2017, 05:19:37 AM by skogge »
 
Read October 10, 2017, 09:23:59 PM #16
redrhodie

Re: Janee

Lovely little tune. Nice melodi and a pleasant voice/delivery.
Since I am such a lo-fi / DIY-pop lover I love this. Dunno what will happen if you polish it though? Maybe better, but better for me? Smiley
I love the off-beat drums, not really sure about the chorused guitar, maybe I would have wanted the vocals a little more in my face / breathy because they at times feels a bit distant.
But hey, it makes me happy and grows a smila on my face.
What more can you ask for in a song?

Thanks so much! Makes my day, putting a smile on your face.


Life is just a dream.
 
Read October 16, 2017, 05:44:02 PM #17
Neil C

Re: Janee

hi,
liked the storytelling which is where I get the TP reference.
and enjoying the guitar pop and your vocals, which are cool.
loved the stripped down bit towards age end when you double your vocals
 Smiley
neil


songwriter of no repute..
 
Read October 16, 2017, 11:07:30 PM #18
Vandayay

Re: Janee

Hi

Nice song. I agree with others that the solo needs to 'let go' a bit more, but for me it's the rhythm guitar that to ponderous and heavy. I can see you wanted a 60s 'jingle-jangle sound' to it, but it might work better acoustic and a bit lighter. Also it could work well a few bpm faster??

Good luck
 
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