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Ghost Of Your Past

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jonlint

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« on: September 26, 2017, 11:58:17 AM »
Hi all,

Penned some lyrics to a song idea.  Its a cryptic song, I know.  Feedback welcome.

GHOST OF YOUR PAST
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

It’s the same apparition
Coming back
To warn of the future
With a flashback

It, spooks, and, scares, you
It, knows, just, how, to
Exploit, your, weakness
And, your, help…, less…, ness

You, can’t, escape, from
The ghost of your past
Like a phantom limb
The ghost of your past

The ghost of your past
The ghost of your past

Now a big storm is formin’
In your mind
The past has escaped you
Can’t be confined

You, should, have, lis…, tened
Your, doom’s, now, chris…, tened
Ign…, nored, your, weak…, ness
Now, you, are, help…, less

You, can’t, escape, from
The ghost of your past
Like a phantom limb
The ghost of your past

The ghost of your past
The ghost of your past

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« Reply #1 on: September 26, 2017, 12:28:01 PM »
Fine lyrics that I look forward to being set to music.  this can be great with the right musical treatment!

Paul

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« Reply #2 on: September 26, 2017, 01:49:04 PM »
Fine lyrics that I look forward to being set to music.  this can be great with the right musical treatment!

Paul

Thanks for the compliment Paul.  I already have a music piece I wrote earmarked for this, but wanted first to get feedback on the lyrics.  Stay tuned.

Further comments welcome.

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« Reply #3 on: September 26, 2017, 08:35:15 PM »
Fine lyrics that I look forward to being set to music.  this can be great with the right musical treatment!

Paul

Thanks for the compliment Paul.  I already have a music piece I wrote earmarked for this, but wanted first to get feedback on the lyrics.  Stay tuned.

Further comments welcome.

Recorded the song idea.  Feedback welcome:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/ghost-of-your-past

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« Reply #4 on: September 26, 2017, 09:04:02 PM »
Fine lyrics that I look forward to being set to music.  this can be great with the right musical treatment!

Paul

Thanks for the compliment Paul.  I already have a music piece I wrote earmarked for this, but wanted first to get feedback on the lyrics.  Stay tuned.

Further comments welcome.

Recorded the song idea.  Feedback welcome:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/ghost-of-your-past

That was totally not what I was expecting, but i think it worked well. I thought from the lyrics it was going to be haunting and lush with ambient synthesizers. You went in a totally direction. Really rocking. Not really my thing, but kids are gonna love it.

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« Reply #5 on: September 27, 2017, 07:31:43 AM »
I've only read the lyric, and won't get to listen til the weekend.  (away from my own computer). 

My first thought was that the title should be "Phantom Limb" and perhaps accentuate that more in the lyric. 

Just a thought.  Doesn't even amount to a "suggestion." 
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« Reply #6 on: September 27, 2017, 08:05:13 AM »
I've only read the lyric, and won't get to listen til the weekend.  (away from my own computer). 

My first thought was that the title should be "Phantom Limb" and perhaps accentuate that more in the lyric. 

Just a thought.  Doesn't even amount to a "suggestion." 

Hi there,

Thanks for the suggestion.  Alice In Chains have a song called Phantom Limb already, and there are some similarities in the style, so for this reason alone, I think it would not be the best idea.  Great suggestion though - if it wasn't for AIC I would probably take you up on that suggestion.