Pop music at its best - so, so melodic, holds interest throughout. I absolutely love the backing vocals which are executed to perfection and take this to another level.
The production is excellent and IMHO you don't need any professional help in this regard. If I am being super picky, I do think you need to bring the lead vocal forward just slightly in the mix, perhaps a touch of compression and judicious use of EQ might do it, easily fixed.
Loved listening to this 
"Pop music at it's best" may have just made my whole week. Yep, been working on this vocal over the last couple of days. Definitely had my head in it too long and begun hearing words that weren't een there! Thanks for your feedback, I'm glad you liked it.
Really enjoyed this Jack. The lyrics won me over before I'd played it. "Hitler ruined eugenics for everyone" is at once funny and edgy and I liked the ticker tape line a ton as well. Again I couldn't follow the overall narrative or tell you what the song's about in any specific way, but didn't feel I needed to in order to enjoy it.
Musically, great vocals again, I picked up the ghost of the Smiths in the descending guitar lines. You already know the vocals are a bit quiet but apart from that no crits from me, an elegant slice of intelligent pop that's fizzing with evocative images.
That Hitler line is a little cheeky, I think. If there were ever a barrier to radio it's probably putting Hitler in your song... I'm a big Smiths fan, and probably a bigger fan of Marr than Morrissey. His jangly, melodic style is a huge influence on the guitar I'm using for this album. Thanks a bunch!
Jack, You're melody work is always exceptional. You've either never smoked a cigarette in you're life or are much younger than me (or both) I love the bouncy melodic feel and the interesting tie in with the lyrics. Quality stuff
Thankyou PompeyJazz, glad you enjoyed. I did smoke for a bit from 18-21 but I quite about a year ago. My voice and breathing has definitely improved. And also yeah I'm relatively young. Every little helps!
Was listening thinking, ha Jack could never enter the "Dark" competition, but then listened a bit closer and realised how wrong I was! Interesting all round, lyrics taking me to mushroom season rather than strawberry season at times. Only thing I would say is that I don't now have much recall of what went on. Maybe I'm with Paulski on wanting a bit more hookiness... but extremely good sounding recordings here and great vocals as usual, and you have a knack for creating a great upbeat atmosphere.
ahaha thanks Adam! I am thinking of entering the dark competition if I have the time. Would like to do something a little less bouncy. The lyrics are intentionally ambiguous - I'm enjoying creating images and living things up to the imagination and interpretation.
Thank you guys x
