Hey Jay, welcome.
I listened to this through the link you posted in your other thread.
For just an iPhone recording it sounds really good!
Your voice sounds just fine, I liked the melody of the verses too, and the acoustic strumming felt just right for what you have so far.
I did feel it was "half a good song" at the moment though as I thought you need more than the 4 chord pattern to take it somewhere interesting. It felt like you've nailed the verses but the la-la-las didn't really work for me as a chorus over the same chords (it felt like you'd run out of words?); I could however totally imagine you varying the chord pattern at that point and making it fly. OR, if you do want to stick with the same 4 chords throughout, some fuller production so you can vary the layers of tracks and stop it becoming monotonous by the end.
I hope you stick with this one.
(I'm from Brighton too by the way, live in Hanover up the big hill... there's a couple of Brightonians active on here.)