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Read August 08, 2017, 09:36:49 PM #0
pompeyjazz

The Line

Apologies, One day early but I'm going away tomorrow.....

A lot of my more recent songs have been rather upbeat and poppy so I've decided to write something a bit moody for a change

Alzheimer's eh ? That's a friggin horrible disease and it's something that were going to have to come to terms with more often.

The Line, is the imaginary line that an Alzheimer's sufferer crosses when they really can't remember you. Painful to witness.

I hope I haven't depressed you too much – Sorry !

https://soundcloud.com/pompeyjazz/the-line

The Line

Don't know what to do with myself
They tell me - it's to do with my health
Memory – Tell me what did I say
Can't remember what I did yesterday

Once I cross the line there's no way back it's only time
No illusion, just confusion

I remember back when I was a boy
And details – Of my favourite toy
Faces – That are talking at me
I wonder – Who they could possibly be

Once I cross the line there's no way back it's only time
No illusion, just confusion

Fading – Is it present or past ?
How long – Will my confusion last ?

Once I cross the line there's no way back it's only time
No illusion, just confusion

(c) Bradley - 2017
 
Read August 08, 2017, 10:37:36 PM #1
Jenna

Re: The Line

Dark. Painful. You took a slowly mind-devouring disease, devised a dividing line beyond which there is nothing but unknowns and questions, then put it in the first person with intensity behind the vocals driving it straight through the heart in combination with the dragging rhythm to the bluesy Gilmouresque guitar licks. The underlying guitar tones scream out epic tragedy, which it is in every family affected. A ten-pin strike.
 
Read August 08, 2017, 11:18:48 PM #2
Buc McMaster

Re: The Line

A bit moody, eh?   Grin  Yeah......reckon that's right!

Love the plodding nature of this one.  The seeming anger in your voice I'm sure is one of the emotions faced by those afflicted with this terrible cloud.  My father is going through this now and I often wonder how much awareness he has of what is happening to him.....slowly.  Does he have moments of lucidity long enough to understand what's going on?  Or is it just confusion all the time, as you say.

The guitar wandering around under your vocal reminds me of Sam Andrew of Big Brother & the Holding Company.  Well done, sir, well done.
 
Read August 09, 2017, 11:32:19 AM #3
PaulAds

Re: The Line

Hi John

Yikes!

Dark and unremitting. Captures the confusion and despair perfectly.

Powerful stuff, Mr B  Smiley


heart of stone, feet of clay, knob of butter
 
Read August 09, 2017, 02:31:29 PM #4
shadowfax

Re: The Line

Damn..was just coming out of depression and this happens... A dark and darker song..one extreme to the other comes to mind...

powerful stuff John mate!! Smiley Smiley
 
Read August 10, 2017, 01:07:40 PM #5
Martinswede

Re: The Line

Strong stuff, good stuff.

I really like the second verse.
Also the harmonica(?) in the back.
 
Read August 10, 2017, 01:38:49 PM #6
Neil C

Re: The Line

John,
I've been considering the very same subject i think.
Anyway the tune is really good and enjoyed the arrangement.
My main feedback is around the timing, the music is ahead of the drums which drag and confuses me I'm afraid.  The guitars and vocals are ahead in the first part of verse 1 and on the pre chorus. Just needs a bit of tightening uo.
A touch of Lennon in there with those great defending chords.
Have a great time off
Portentous
 Smiley
neil



songwriter of no repute..
 
Read August 10, 2017, 01:45:50 PM #7
PaulyX

Re: The Line

Super powerful and raw stuff PJ.
Personally I like the slightly wobbly touches like the way you seem to bend some of the notes (tremolo arm?) and the way the timing shifts just slightly... made the whole thing feel a bit unstable and sinister which fits the lyric.
A song that hits you in the head and the chest at once.


It's all too beautiful.
 
Read August 10, 2017, 06:10:30 PM #8
lillypilly

Re: The Line

just finished watching a doco on the late Glen Campbell actually everyone should watch it.
this song immediately took me there

cheers
Lilly
 
Read August 10, 2017, 06:40:22 PM #9
Mikey

Re: The Line

Lovely and dark, like the dirty guitars and the gritty vocal, I thought a dirty guitar solo would sound good in there, buts thats probably just me, good solid track, reminds me of something but I can't think what it is.
nice one Pompey

Mikey

 
Read August 10, 2017, 08:12:47 PM #10
Morefrog Jones

Re: The Line

Ouch that was a 'power pain ballad'  Shocked - haunting use of gothic instrumental and powerful lyrics to get over the message....Songwriting wise up there as one of your best. Could sense a touch of John Lennon in there.
 
Read August 10, 2017, 08:29:21 PM #11
Skub

Re: The Line

Yo pomps.

I thought I'd posted on this one,but it was soundcloud I left the comment on. Doh!

Very Beatles/Lennon beginning. Then Floyd influences on the 'remember back when I was a boy' part. Cool harmonies here too.

I hear Sabbath in places,in those doom laden heavy riffs.

It's a thought provoking monster and a reminder to us all to enjoy every sandwich.  Cool
 
Read August 12, 2017, 10:07:57 PM #12
pompeyjazz

Re: The Line

Thank you all so much. With regard to timing it really was intended to be like that, disorientated, confused, out of tune slightly. Thanks all so much  Smiley
 
Read August 15, 2017, 09:24:20 AM #13
Jamie

Re: The Line

Hi John, yes very John Lennon in style and delivery. The arrangement and tempo suit the subject and there are touches of pink Floyd in the instrumental sections. Very good song!
I'm off to slit my wrists now........ Wink
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie
 
Read August 16, 2017, 10:02:51 AM #14
TheButcher

Re: The Line


I really like that rough, moody sound - it has a live feel. the spooky guitar chords and progressions are great.
pretty intensive
pretty good
 
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