ATLANTA: Bitter Tears

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Buc McMaster

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« on: August 06, 2017, 05:23:48 PM »
Well I think I got this one where it needs to be.  The performance certainly needs polishing with repetition.  I was singing the verses last night and the lyric and melody for the refrain just came right out as if I'd known what it was all along.  Moved the capo up a fret to allow better vocal dynamics than previous takes.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RNgZGcrmuzI

ATLANTA:  Bitter Tears   The Bucster, August 2017

That house near the corner……no one’s been there for years
……they all left for the border……with broken hearts and bitter tears
The railway station behind us……they burned it down as you can see
……it’s still there and reminds us……of Sherman’s march to the sea

There'll be no quarter for the rebels…….I’ll make Georgia howl!
……some said he was the devil…… or some relation anyhow
With the fall of Atlanta…….they came on like a storm
……and all the way to Savannah…..the heart of Dixie was torn

   Will we ever be the same……should we hang our heads in shame
   Will we stand here in the rain of these bitter tears

Thirty thousand south to Macon……Augusta threatened in the east
……all was broken, burned or taken……the land devoured by the beast
And they could hear the Yanks a’comin’……they could see the smokey sky
……all those women and their youngin’s…..some defiant, some just cried

O’r the hills and ‘cross the rivers……unrelenting as a flood
……like an unrepentant sinner…..rebellion’s price is paid in blood
Three hundred miles the army plundered……Savannah fell without a fight
……the heart of Georgia torn asunder…..and Carolina in their sights

   Will we ever be the same……should we hang our heads in shame
   Will we stand here in the rain of these bitter tears
   Will we ever be the same……will we rise in freedom’s name
   Or will we stand here in the rain of our bitter tears
« Last Edit: August 14, 2017, 04:17:46 PM by Buc McMaster »

Mikey

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« Reply #1 on: August 06, 2017, 08:13:33 PM »
I enjoyed that a lot, I like songs with a story, and the lyrics portrayed the story very well, I like the simplicity of the music and the song kept me interested all the way through.

I also thought the vocal was good, your voice suits the style very well

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« Reply #2 on: August 07, 2017, 09:27:21 AM »
Really liked pretty much everything...

The picking, the lyrics, the story, the simplicity, the melody, and the fact that Georgia and Carolina are in there.

For some reason I always like songs with American place names in.

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« Reply #3 on: August 07, 2017, 10:29:10 AM »
I think this is fab, Buc

It's timeless, despite being set 150 years ago, the lyric avoids the disconnect that often seems to occur when writing in the present day about historical events. The music fits perfectly too...the guitar sounds excellent and your vocal has just the right amount of strength and sadness to convey the message perfectly.

A smasher  :)
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Buc McMaster

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« Reply #4 on: August 07, 2017, 01:51:29 PM »
Thanks for taking the time to listen.....and I sincerely appreciate the kind remarks!   ;D

I'm pretty pleased with this one.  Had the guitar part for a couple of weeks before finally being struck by the lyric and melody......that's usually the way it works for me......something with the instrument eventually steers me to a lyrical concept, then it's a matter of tweaking it until it's right.  I understand how I come to find and work a lyric, but I have absolutely no idea where melodies come from.

Been awhile since I put anything up here....part of it just a dry spell, part of it a bit of an inferiority complex.  Most of what's posted here is top notch stuff with very high production value while all I'm able to generate is single track audio/video of just guitar & voice.  I tell myself that what I do is the bare essence of the song, the skin & bones, and if the tune can stand on that alone it must have some value.  Thanks for the encouragement on that front!

I'll be sure to do some reviews this week as I understand that is part of being part of the community!  Thank you again!!

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« Reply #5 on: August 07, 2017, 11:12:15 PM »
Yo Buc.

Great lyrics and as with all good songs,one guitar and a voice is enough.

'Nuff said.  8)


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« Reply #6 on: August 08, 2017, 02:43:54 PM »
Hi, this is very good. Loved the chord progressions and your voice sits really well in this style of song. Just the right amount of sentiment and pathos for an interesting lyric.
Excellent stuff!
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« Reply #7 on: August 08, 2017, 06:05:50 PM »
Lovely guitar playing Buc - That first chord change really gets me. Think this is fabulous. Brave of you to perform this on vid as well. Excellent work

Buc McMaster

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« Reply #8 on: August 09, 2017, 12:24:52 AM »
That first chord change really gets me.

Funny you should mention that......  The second chord was one of those lucky mistakes I am prone to make.  Fingers just went there of their own accord behind A-minor and it gave me pause.  Still have no idea what the chord is........dumb luck.

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« Reply #9 on: August 09, 2017, 12:36:54 AM »
Man, I gotta say I love the lyrics in this - they would almost sing themselves, but you do a fine job of delivering them. We were at that battle seeing those people struggle.
The chorus is stellar too.
Nothing to nit here, nothin' - great job!

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« Reply #10 on: August 09, 2017, 03:46:18 PM »
Fine lyrics and your voice is well suited to this song...you appear to be using chords I've never heard of but that's another story,
it seemed to be weighted to the left a little, dunno if that's to do with mic placement or not..
anyway, I fine song.. :)
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« Reply #11 on: August 10, 2017, 02:31:21 PM »
But,
Fine tune I like it a lot. Great lyrics, like the melody and vocals. Good chorus too.
I have two small thoughts to consider, I think you could have some more vocal variation on the verses as you develop it. And second maybe have some more choruses to break up the verse between versers 3 and 4.
Classy
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« Reply #12 on: August 10, 2017, 02:39:57 PM »
Really well played and seems to fit your voice very well.  The one word that I'd used to describe this is 'dignified'.  I don't know anything at all about the historical context so the lyrics are a bit lost on me, but I enjoyed the song none the less and the manner of delivery in particular.
It's all too beautiful.

Buc McMaster

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« Reply #13 on: August 13, 2017, 03:57:47 PM »
Thanks very much for the listens and kind words!

PAULSKI:  I do try to paint clear pictures with my lyrics to draw the listener in to the story.  Thank you!

SHADOW:  Prolly is heavy on the left.......recorded on an iPad with no further production than that.

NEIL:  I agree with the vocal variation thing.  I have altered vocal dynamics as I've become more comfortable with the lyric.......still a work in progress as far as performance goes.

PAULYX:  Dignified.  Thank you.  Not a word that I would have considered, but I like it.

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« Reply #14 on: August 15, 2017, 07:55:04 AM »
Good to see you back Buc.......I was sad to hear you gone. i love your acoustic guitar songs. There just aren't too many of us on this site :D
Nice song, man. A real pleasure. A lamenting lyric, hauntingly sung.
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