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Read August 06, 2017, 03:54:25 PM #0
Featherstone

Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Hello All

This is my first post -

I have finished a song and uploaded it as a private track on soundcloud -

https://soundcloud.com/featherstonecreative/chasing-stars/s-oCuCs

It is a song about going travelling - looking above the clouds on your way to adventures new.

Chasing Stars
north and south
chase them round
til I hit the ground
the ash tray is full
your rainbow ends
inside a promise
I cant re mend

I wish you were here
will you come for me?
Cant wrap my arms round a memory
when I'm with you I don't wanna go home
when I'm with you I don't wanna go home

Look out the window
above the clouds
look how they shine
they shine out proud
and rain drops fall
onto the wings
is it a promise or is it a dream

I wish you were here
come for me
cant wrap my arms
round a memory
when im with you i dont wanna go home
when im with you i dont wanna go home.



Ben Featherstone



 
Read August 06, 2017, 07:22:26 PM #1
Mikey

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Nicely performed track, I like the strings, and the guitar picking is very nice, good lyrics nicely sung with a good melody

Nice sounding mix too.

Well done, Mikey
 
Read August 06, 2017, 10:07:07 PM #2
Featherstone

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Thank you for your kind comments Mikey,

 
Read August 08, 2017, 07:50:42 PM #3
Martinswede

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Hi and welcome!

Your tune has this atmospheric feeling that I really like. It makes me feel like I'm looking through a telescope or something. Words and music blend very well.

I'd like the vocals to be a bit louder to make the softer parts more defined.
Also the verse and chorus are quite similar in how they sound. They sound good but the chorus could have a bit more intensity.

Martin
 
Read August 09, 2017, 04:15:55 PM #4
Featherstone

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Thank you Martin for taking the time to listen,


Do you think maybe the 'I wish you were here will you come for me, can't wrap my arms round a memory' could do with some backing vocals maybe?

It def needs something I agree, but I've got a lovely bass line, lovely strings, great drummer, It's hard to think of anything else to add. Maybe an overdub for the chorus lines. Female vocals perhaps?

Best
 
Read August 09, 2017, 06:43:54 PM #5
Martinswede

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Yes, I think you should focus on the vocal part of the chorus.
Either changing around a bit in the melody or backing vocals.
 
Read August 10, 2017, 08:21:30 AM #6
shadowfax

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Hi, You'll get a lot more reviews if you join in the community and review other peeps work my friend... Smiley Smiley
 
Read August 12, 2017, 12:00:21 PM #7
PaulyX

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Hey Ben, a very well performed and balanced mellow song.  Strings are quite loud - they are lovely and one of the stars of the piece, but to my ears dominate in the mix more than they need to since they drown out the guitar picking which is also strong.  Lyrics-wise I like the first verse most - lines like "the ash try is full" are fresh and unexpected (whereas to be honest the images in the second verse are a bit 'tried and tested'... can you squeeze another ash-tray moment in?!).  You've got a good characterful voice too - hope to hear more of your stuff.  And like Shadowfax says, jump in and start reviewing... Pauly


It's all too beautiful.
 
Read August 13, 2017, 09:40:21 PM #8
exfairy

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

This is such a pretty song! Smiley Only comment I can make - you could maybe shorten the instrumentals. They're gorgeous but could be shortened by 8 bars or so...
I know this might sound weird, would you let me do a cover of this? It's so lovely, I would love to sing it Smiley
 
Read August 16, 2017, 10:06:13 AM #9
Featherstone

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Hello All,


Many thanks for your kind comments, I have listened to and will respond to others in the community,

Please feel free exfairy, don't release it before me and nick all the royalties :p joking aside what a lovely flatering compliment to receive.

capo 1st fret -  cm d G EM d g em - cm wish you were here.

Ben Featherstone

 
Read August 16, 2017, 03:33:47 PM #10
deegeorge

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

I enjoyed that listen Ben .Good finger style and nice production .I'm a Nick Drake fan and Chasing Stars reminded me of his musical style. Good work
 
Read August 16, 2017, 09:18:16 PM #11
Eline97

Re: Chasing Stars - New Song - Feedback Please :D

Lovely song with great lurics. I especially loved the line 'can't wrap my arms around a memory'. Just beautiful! However, As said before, I think the instrumentals could be a little shorter and the vocals somewhat louder. But I liked the sound of the instrumentals a lot, with the strings. Nice song.
 
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