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Read August 05, 2017, 08:37:24 PM #0
xmasterxmk2

My first finished set of lyrics The song is called Taking Back Words swearing

PLEASE GIVE ME FEEDBACK AND BE HONEST ABOUT IT

Rap:
So you start by saying your sorry,but the real truth here is you never loved me
Then you make a f****ng apology
Trying to decieve me but believe me I dont break easy
I walk alone along my own road
The only things I care bout are family and home
And those people I call friends they arent pretend

Chorus:
We all have dreams our own ideology
Im sick on my mic. I've studied psychology
Back away from the lies,keep yourself to ya self
I've been taking back words I said to somebody else

Im afraid of what I know, I know too much
But all them people out there dont give a f**k
My heart is gonna explode I drop into panic mode
The life is throwing me way too much
Making it so I wanna give up
take my life be buried alive,
Anything if I can keep my pride

Chorus:
We all have dreams our own ideology
Im sick on my mic. I've studied psychology
Stay away from the lies keep yourself to ya self ,
I've been taking back words I said to someone else

Bridge:
There's something I have inside, that tears down the walls of my mind
I breakdown and lash out in swing of violence I become so dim
I let out the anger by beggining to sing
I whisper the words I remember to those who I know care
But I'm taking back words that were never even there
« Last Edit: August 05, 2017, 08:39:02 PM by xmasterxmk2 »
 
Read August 06, 2017, 06:46:07 PM #1
PaulAds

Re: My first finished set of lyrics The song is called Taking Back Words swearing

Hello

Really good, powerful stuff...I think it could lose the "f"s and just as powerful.

Are you looking to collaborate with musicians or do you do music too?

Quite a few folks here are really good at setting lyrics to music and verse vice a (as you can perhaps tell I'm not one of them)

Keep them coming  Smiley


heart of stone, feet of clay, knob of butter
 
Read August 12, 2017, 07:21:45 PM #2
Pawy

Re: My first finished set of lyrics The song is called Taking Back Words swearing

Hi! This is cool, but sometimes it gets confusing because the lyrics seem to be directed at a specific person in some parts, and then they seem to be directed at more people in others. Idk if I'm explaining myself lol, but congrats con your first set of finished lyrics (:
 
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