Eco system blues

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Vintage54

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« on: July 25, 2017, 08:57:57 PM »

                             Eco system blues

                    Whales are on the beach
                    They lost direction
                    Or maybe they just gave up hope
                    Stars are out of reach
                    No place to run to
                    If the Eco systems broke

                    Hope to God it isn't true
                    If it is
                    What more can we do

                    Except sing the blues

                    The full moon is out
                    Last wolves are howling
                    A sad wind carries every note
                    Howling for what's gone
                    They know there's no returning
                    They know the Eco systems broke

                    Hope to God it isn't true
                    If it is
                    What more can we do

                    Except sing the blues

                    Saws are buzzing
                    Trees are falling
                    Coral vanishing like smoke
                    The sky is thin
                    The ice is melting
                    Looks like the Eco systems broke

                    Hope to God it isn't true
                    If it is
                    What more can we do

                    Except sing the blues

                    Life's natural chain
                    Beautiful and golden
                    Left undisturbed will always cope
                    But the hand of man
                    That golden chain has tarnished
                    And it's fragile links are broke

                    Wish to God it wasn't true
                    But it is
                    So what more can we do

                    Except sing the blues.

                           Vintage54

      I don't know, maybe it needs a bridge or a middle eight, tell me what you think.

                   

Paulski

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« Reply #1 on: July 25, 2017, 09:43:55 PM »
Hi Vintage - The Eco system is out of money? It should have said something!
Seriously though this is a good write IMHO.
Think you meant "in" the hand of man ?
Nary a nit to be found beyond that.  ;D ;D

Paul

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« Reply #2 on: July 26, 2017, 10:43:29 PM »
Almost miss this, another great write Vintage, love the way each verse and chorus flows into that line
"Except sing the blues"  has a magic of understand your flow.

Does it need a bridge, knowing your style all it needs is the flow and as always you have delivered, bridge or no bridge, i said it before and ill says it again, you need to get your lyrics out there Man   8)

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« Reply #3 on: July 26, 2017, 11:25:17 PM »
Brilliant...I don't think it needs anything, except a tune to make the whole world hear it and take notice.
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« Reply #4 on: July 28, 2017, 07:52:22 AM »
Lovely imagery. Great flow. Engaging. I think you've done a great job telling the story without a middle eight and without getting repetitive or predictable. I look forward to hearing it put to music.