Lyrics going spare - free to a good home

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Darren1664

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« on: July 06, 2017, 12:11:12 PM »
Hey

So I originally posted this on the collaborations league thread but thought I'd post it here if anybody is able to use it. Chop and change as much as necessary! Or disregard entirely :P (oh and the rhythm and rhyme suited the song they were wrote for, in my opinion, but may look a bit messy without musical context)

Thanks

Darren....


Hey

I'd written some lyrics for a track for someone from another board but they weren't what they were looking for so I'd thought I'd share them here. They might be a bit cheese on toasts and the subject matter not the happiest but I am happy for anyone to use them if they have a use! Feel free to amend as necessary

Braver than brave

I was tired and broken and would have left this world behind me
If I knew for sure that I’d hold you again
Feeling crushed; I’d loved and lost
How do I move on?
Oh, how I needed you then.

You told me that I would fill my heart with sorrow
You begged me to try and love somebody new
The years rolled by, I moved on with life
I learnt to love again
But I still need you now.

Love transcends through flesh and bone
I still feel your love burn within my soul
Some body loved is never truly gone
‘cause in our hearts, you live on

Braver than brave; your last words when you were bound
To slip away into the night was to tell me that it’s going to be all right
You said ‘Hey, it’s going to be OK’

Then you held me for the final time
You squeezed me and to where your life begun
You said, ‘I love you mum’.

All the best
Darren

Martinswede

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« Reply #1 on: July 07, 2017, 06:29:17 PM »
Hi Darren!

It was a while since I did some collaboration here so I'm glad to have found your lyrics.
The style is kind of in a spoken way or a diary I think. Changes might be made, if so by
something much more blunt than a scalpel. I'll print it and put it by the piano.

Cheers!
/Martin


Martinswede

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« Reply #2 on: July 07, 2017, 07:21:27 PM »
Hi again!

Now I've read the lyrics a few times and apart from some structural stuff it flows pretty well.
I had nothing better to do so I've put chords and melody to it and turned it into verse/chorus/outro parts.

The song is going straight into Smashing Pumpkins ballad territory btw.

/Martin

Darren1664

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« Reply #3 on: July 07, 2017, 08:00:00 PM »
Hey Martin a rushed reply for now (little busy) but checking in to say....

Epic!! Thank you so much for working on this and I really look forward to hearing the results!! And yes please hack away ;) good luck man!!

Darren