[adamfarr]

A little bit of a rush to get in there before the upcoming deadline, but here it is. An experiment with a different style for me: it set out to be Sheerhan-inspired but not sure about that now. I have to say that that fake rapping isn't as easy as it sounds. That last line still sounds not quite right too! Also, apologies to any Spanish guitarists out there. But it's short and (for me at least) fun.

So, I'm in, and the competition definitely got me doing something I wouldn't normally, so I'm happy about that.

All specific and constructive comments welcome, as always. Thanks for listening.

https://soundcloud.com/lutehill/white-bikini-master-27-06-2017a

White Bikini

V1
With your two white strings and your festival band
You got the full attention of my new Raybans
Trying to look cool, elbow in the sand
Only one side of me was getting tanned

PRE-CH
Finally I heard myself say
Hey, can I borrow your creme de soleil
You said don't bother, just live for today...

CHORUS
That night you introduced me to caipirinha
All you needed to seduce me was your white bikini
Down in one's the way you go
When I would rather take it slow
You were all inclusive and I was pay as you go

V2
It took two hours and five San Miguels
To find you in the bar and tell you how I felt
You said let's go where there's nobody else
We can make sand angels and our names out of shells

PRE-CH
Hand in hand, I heard myself say
Let's make them higher, away from the waves
You said but mañana they'll be gone anyway...

CH

V3
I woke wanting coffee but you said beer
Doubt like sand in my pants, while you had it all clear
I said it's so far, you said: "the airport is near,
But I'm the type of girl you only meet once a year"

FINAL CH

(c) Adam Farr, 2017

[PaulAds]

First off...sounds really great...your recording and production skills are really coming along.

Lyrics are very good with your usual smartness and wit.

Good, jaunty tune too...a lot to like here...a great entry.

[Jambrains]

Lol! "Only one side of me was getting tanned". Love the lyrics, just fab!!

Not sure if it is Sheeran-style, actually I'm not sure what style it is but who cares?
Most enjoyable regardless of how you label it.

Good mix, thinkt the guitar is taking up a little to much space, maybe eq out some at 300-500 Hz or so? Maybe take out some low end as well to make some room for the bass guitar? No sure about the kick sound (esp in the break down) but that is down to taste really.

Summary, fab lyrics and solid song/performnce, me like!

[TheButcher]

Finally I heard myself say
Hey, can I borrow your creme de soleil

hahaha!!

great.

the chorus stuff "kai kai kai caipirinha" superb

wish i could write like that.

B

[Skub]

Yo Adam.

 

A fine song for a grey nondescript day,as it is here right now.

Humorous lyrics really carry the song and paint a detailed and cleverly worded picture of a holiday fling.

Cool as. 

[PaulyX]

You can't help but grin to this Adam, fun lyrics and I always like a song with a 'stutter' in it ("Changes", "My Generation"... you're keeping good company!).  I see you tightened up the lyrics since sharing on the lyrics board and it all works just fine now.  No suggestions from me other than that I could also imagine an 'alternative' version that is a much faster tempo and choppier guitars ... not that it doesn't work well as it is with the sunny relaxed feel, I just think a fun song like this would also zing if you put some springs beneath it and "punked it up" a bit, so if you ever remix it maybe that's one option.   Good luck in the comp.

[pompeyjazz]

Love the st st stuttering Adam. Another brilliant off the wall offering. The lyrics are well thought out and just fit the groove exactly, had me smiling from the start as I know to expect the unexpected from you. What were you doing in that picture though Adam ?

[Kristupas]

The verse vocal melody reminded me of Depeche mode type of singing.

And the choruses, like the good old ska genre
(check out Prague Ska Conspiracy, the chorus reminded me of them)

I really loved the chorus melody "Cai,cai, caipirinha )) "

In general : A song, that is nice to listen to.

Congratulations

Kris

[CaliaMoko]

I love this! It doesn't have any message that strikes me at all, but your presentation really makes the song for me. I love the way you perform it. The low notes you sing, the bass, the "stutter", slowing down on "take it slow". There's nothing I would change. It's great!

Vicki

[Viscount Cramer & His Orchestra]

Opens nicely....love that first chord!

The groove is nice. Chorus is the highlight for me, really very catchy....though of course it's the pick-up from the verses...oh, you're calling it the pre-chorus.. that makes the chorus what it is, so can't fault the verse/pre-chorus either! The ends of pre-chorus do a good job of announcing the chorus with the vocal going up and building up a nice anticipation for what's to come.

Yes your productions are coming on well. Timing is getting tighter too and everything coming together much better....not easy with your propensity for stops and slow-downs. Good job well done here. One of your best so far I think Adam....and maybe a different style but still very Adam Farr.

[crystalsuzy]

WOW<Adam! I think this is fantastic! the lyrics are so clever and funny, and I think you did a fine job
of rapping the last verse. the chorus is super catchy Great job on the vocals and backing track 
Good luck with this 

[Paulski]

Hi Adam

Super lyrics and you twist them nicely to fit 
My fav is "pay pay pay as you go".
I don't often think of repeating words and it totally works here so a lesson for me to learn 
I love the fact you're not a prisoner to the tick track. Those stops and starts are hard to do in a DAW but that's old school songwriting and I like it muchly!

Good entry for the big race - should do well I safely predict 

Paul

[Darren1664]

Hi Adam

Great track. I love the originality of your vocals and melody. My fave bit was Bi Bi Bikini! You have a great way of singing your songs. This is really catchy with some very clever and funny lyrics. Another great entry for the comp!

Cheers pal

Darren

[Mverboekend]

Hi Adam,

Love what you made, especially the "fake rapping" as you call it, I can only imaging how difficult that must have been. And the lyrics are hilarious, how do you come up with it? Very clever put together, just fab

[IronKnee]

Well....with a title like that, I just can't resist
This song wasn't at all what I imagined....cool twists and loved the surprises.Very unique, and a pleasure!!
                -T