[Skub]

I got this so far,let me know if it's how folk imagine,or if anyone wants a better dig at it. If we're headed the right road,I'll need to get the individual stem tracks from Bin to shape the song and make everything fit.

https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/spin-the-bottle-v1/s-Hx7BA

[Jenna]

Skub, thanks for taking the time out of your busy life to get something down. I'm not sure how the others were hearing it, but I was hearing it at a brisker pace, like a peppy dance tune, roughly 2x faster than the uploaded recording. Below is the most recent version of the lyrics we've agreed on. If you feel anything in there needs changing just give us a shout and we'll hammer it out for you. I do like the feel behind your vocals in your melody. The idea was to start the song slow like it was going to be a sad country tune, then pick up the pace for the party.

This would be how I would sequence this and cut back some of the lines.  Didn't add much.  Didn't feel it needed much added.  

FOOL'S PARADISE:

I'm picking up a new old habit
And chilling it on ice
Spinning vinyl memories
At a bar named Fool's Paradise

Since you left I have been
half-baked out of my mind
Filling up this vacancy
With every liquid I can find

(pick up pace to party tune)

Here in Paradise Johnnie Walker sits down
Orders Jim Beam to pour another round
Then he lets out a Rebel Yell
So loud it echoes all around Heaven Hill

I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
With every women I can find.

They serve up Painkillers,
Fireballs and Rum Swizzles
Topping them off with,
Little splashes and a drizzles

They'll pour  call it you Southern Comfort
It starts up after eight
For every man or woman one who comes around
Who comes by to To deny and nurse their pain

Rumor has it you've moved on,
and left our love behind
But And, I'm still dancing every night
With every women I can find.

Damn the Weather yells out Tom Collins
I'd rather have it Dark 'n Stormy
Even dark and stormy, Long Island's within reach.
Hugging We got girls in bikinis chugging Appletinis
Enjoying the Sea Breeze with Sex on the Beach.

Rumor has it you've moved on,
and left our love behind
But I'm still dancing every night
With every women I can find.

They serve up Painkillers,
Fireballs and Rum Swizzles
Topping them off with,
Little splashes and a drizzles

SPOKEN OUT-TRO:  "Say, whatever did you hear what happened to Harry Harvey Wallbanger last night?" "I heard He went off for some hanky-panky with that Pink Lady with the Angel Face. You know, the one with the fuzzy navel?"

[Skub]

Hi Jenna.

I understood Bin's track was the one to be used,but a slow start and then twice as fast will mean the whole track needs redone from scratch. Best to ask Bin if he has time to do that,unfortunately at the moment I don't.

[Binladeda]

 Hi Guys,

 No way   It took me an age to get the timing right on this.
 It is what it is guys.....It'll be a lot easier changing the lyrics to suit
 the melody/music than the other way round.  If we were in the studio,
 recording a live track, then it would be just nods and winks, but an online
 collab, where communication is always an 'issue', and with a full blown
 production like this....it's a can of worms   Maybe you need a piano
 player/accoustic guitar player. Where it's just one instrument and a beat.
 Then what you're proposing would be easier to achieve.  But changing the
 tempo half way through something like this, you're risking too much......
 for me anyway.  I'm not saying it can't be done, just that I'm not prepared,
 or want to do it.

 For what it's worth.  I think the best way to proceed from here, is to let the
 vocalists sort out the melody.  After all it's them who are going to sing it, and
 they need to be comfortable with it.  Then, they can 'cherry pick' the lyrics to
 fit their melody.  After that, you can fine tune the lyrics......if needed.  I'm
 hoping that Paul is going to try some piano on this as well, and Skub is also
 more than likely going to have a jam along with it.  So let the vocalists have
 it, and see what we've got after they've worked their magic

 If everyone agrees with that, then I'll send the stems to Paulski and Skub,
 If not, then I'll send the stems, to whoever you want.....

 Hope I haven't upset any ego's, Canadians, Irishmen, or Americans 
 quite a little gathering
 Love ya all 


 

[Jenna]

No probs. Have at it.   I was under the impression you were okay with updating it to fit the finalized lyrics. I don't see the current format of the lyrics fitting the music track. Was it composed with our final copy in mind?

[Oldbutyet]

Hey Guys

Ill have a go as adding some vocals later, had a few listens to what been recorded so far and im thinking maybe adding rockabilly hillbilly's style dont really know yet how its going to sound but should have time later on to find out, in the mean time Jenna what chorus are we trying tbh im still thinking the The Prince of Wales verse.

Will try out a few ways just to see where it fits, might even go straight in with it at the start.

[Paulski]

In my wee brain the lyrics (almost  ) fit bin's track.
I hope to take a run at it tomorrow if the weather cooperates (if it rains  )
I'm purposely not going to listen to anyone else's vocal so as not to be influenced by better singers 
 
Paul

[Oldbutyet]

Hey Bin we're nice brunch of strays here alright  more to come 

Okay vocals, we're going need more, just an idea 

https://soundcloud.com/patfeely/spin-the-bottle-and-vocal/s-ALi51

I'm picking up a new old habit
And chilling it out on ice
Spinning vinyl memories
In a bar named Fool's Paradise

Johnnie Walker he sits down
Orders Jim Beam and pour another round
Then he lets out a Rebel Yell
So loud it echoes all around Heaven Hell

I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every woman i can find
Cause since you left baby
I been half-baked out of my mind

The Prince of Wales rolls in with the Ruby Dutchess
On Moscow Mules with Rattlesnakes and White Russians
Trailing behind we got a London fog
That fills up Paradise with Salty dogs

And Johnnie Walker he lets out that Rebel Yell

I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every woman i can find
Cause since you left me baby
I been half-baked out of my mind

One thing for sure Jenna we're going need a female vocalist coming in.

By the way how is that guy on the moose dragging that piano, any word from him yet      

[Paulski]

So this is a chorus idea I had based on bin's track:

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/fools-paridise-chorus-wannabee/s-QbtZl

I must confess, the verse lyrics at their current stage are a little under-whelming to me - sorry.

They don't have good prosody and they seem written to be clever rather than tell a story of why this guy ended up at the FP club.

Anyway - is this the type of chorus that will work - or am I sucking lemons?
Or have I just pissed all the lyricists off and I should bugger off?

Paul

[Skub]

I like it Paul. I also think the Cannuckistanian accent is more in keeping with the song topic than my boghopping tonez!
I agree with you on the lyrical front. To have any chance of making a song work the words will need to be brutally trimmed and simplified. Like Paul,I also would be keen to avoid stepping on toes,so we need opinions.

[Oldbutyet]

Hey Guys dont go all cheesy and cliche   we're just having a bit of fun, trying to put something together call a group collaboration project, in a humorous way i mean we got this far   

Okay we're not all together in a studio but from what im hearing and lyric reading its all starting to come together so lets build on what we have so far, from what im hearing and my own opinion we need to add a female vocals and a really let loose lead guitarist, and a cool finger playing piano player   

Just my thoughts all 

[Paulski]

I got this so far,let me know if it's how folk imagine,or if anyone wants a better dig at it. If we're headed the right road,I'll need to get the individual stem tracks from Bin to shape the song and make everything fit.

https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/spin-the-bottle-v1/s-Hx7BA

Nice one skub. I deliberately didn't listen to this before my attempt and I'm glad I didn't or I'd have bailed on my version Sounds like a Dwight Yoakam hit to me! 

[Paulski]

Hey Bin we're nice brunch of strays here alright  more to come 

Okay vocals, we're going need more, just an idea 

https://soundcloud.com/patfeely/spin-the-bottle-and-vocal/s-ALi51

I'm picking up a new old habit
And chilling it out on ice
Spinning vinyl memories
In a bar named Fool's Paradise

Johnnie Walker he sits down
Orders Jim Beam and pour another round
Then he lets out a Rebel Yell
So loud it echoes all around Heaven Hell

I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every woman i can find
Cause since you left baby
I been half-baked out of my mind

The Prince of Wales rolls in with the Ruby Dutchess
On Moscow Mules with Rattlesnakes and White Russians
Trailing behind we got a London fog
That fills up Paradise with Salty dogs

And Johnnie Walker he lets out that Rebel Yell

I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every woman i can find
Cause since you left me baby
I been half-baked out of my mind

One thing for sure Jenna we're going need a female vocalist coming in.

By the way how is that guy on the moose dragging that piano, any word from him yet      

Haha - cool moves Pat. Who cares about prosody when you can talk the lyrics through to make 'em flow - such a talent my man.
We may end up with three songs here 

[Jenna]

So this is a chorus idea I had based on bin's track:

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/fools-paridise-chorus-wannabee/s-QbtZl

I must confess, the verse lyrics at their current stage are a little under-whelming to me - sorry.

They don't have good prosody and they seem written to be clever rather than tell a story of why this guy ended up at the FP club.

Anyway - is this the type of chorus that will work - or am I sucking lemons?
Or have I just pissed all the lyricists off and I should bugger off?

Paul

I like it, Paulski. Sounds great. The intent of the lyrics was to tell a story using the names of alcoholic beverages. That's all. I put a lot of time into it, but if it's not going to work it's not going to work. What sort of story would you all like to tell about how this man ended up at a bar named Fool's Paradise? The origin of this whole project was in the first verse:

I'm picking up a new old habit and chilling it on ice.
Spinning vinyl memories in this Fool's Paradise.

Does the chorus as written not have good prosody? "Rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm out dancing every night with every woman I can find."

I am still attached to that verse and the chorus (rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm still dancing every night with every woman I can find), but the rest isn't necessary if you all would like to change it. I'm good with that. Just let me know what story line you'd like to follow and we'll get to work on the lyrics. Sound good? Now I'll just add a couple of obvious thoughts on developing the storyline for possibilities:

We're starting out with a verse leading to a breakup, which was supposed to be the sad, slow beginning, but that's been tossed.

We're up-tempo for a dance number, so this is going to be a positive spin on a breakup song.

My upcoming 3-week commitment fell through, so now I'm free again for the next 3 weeks to toy with this song, or any other.

If you want female vocals I can give it a shot. I have a good range and usually can hit the right notes. Harmonies don't come as easily as they used to, but I need to work on those and it would be good practice.

Let me see what I can come up with for a positive breakup storyline. What would you all think of the subject going into fun times naming different women?

[Oldbutyet]

So this is a chorus idea I had based on bin's track:

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/fools-paridise-chorus-wannabee/s-QbtZl

I must confess, the verse lyrics at their current stage are a little under-whelming to me - sorry.

They don't have good prosody and they seem written to be clever rather than tell a story of why this guy ended up at the FP club.

Anyway - is this the type of chorus that will work - or am I sucking lemons?
Or have I just pissed all the lyricists off and I should bugger off?

Paul

I like it, Paulski. Sounds great. The intent of the lyrics was to tell a story using the names of alcoholic beverages. That's all. I put a lot of time into it, but if it's not going to work it's not going to work. What sort of story would you all like to tell about how this man ended up at a bar named Fool's Paradise? The origin of this whole project was in the first verse:

I'm picking up a new old habit and chilling it on ice.
Spinning vinyl memories in this Fool's Paradise.

Does the chorus as written not have good prosody? "Rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm out dancing every night with every woman I can find."

I am still attached to that verse and the chorus (rumor has it you've moved on and left our love behind, but I'm still dancing every night with every woman I can find), but the rest isn't necessary if you all would like to change it. I'm good with that. Just let me know what story line you'd like to follow and we'll get to work on the lyrics. Sound good? Now I'll just add a couple of obvious thoughts on developing the storyline for possibilities:

We're starting out with a verse leading to a breakup, which was supposed to be the sad, slow beginning, but that's been tossed.

We're up-tempo for a dance number, so this is going to be a positive spin on a breakup song.

My upcoming 3-week commitment fell through, so now I'm free again for the next 3 weeks to toy with this song, or any other.

If you want female vocals I can give it a shot. I have a good range and usually can hit the right notes. Harmonies don't come as easily as they used to, but I need to work on those and it would be good practice.

Let me see what I can come up with for a positive breakup storyline. What would you all think of the subject going into fun times naming different women?

Okay now we got the flow on this one, to get you in there Jenna i think we're going need a cool bass line, just to get you walking in then you hit us with something like or whatever.

I don't need you any more
To have a good time
I'm still dancing every night
with every man i can find

Then we put everything we have and more to come together and just let rock