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Let's write a party hit! Group collaboration project?

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« on: June 26, 2017, 06:26:27 AM »
I'm changing the title of this to see if anyone might be interested in a group collaboration on the forum. I started this song from a writing prompt in a songwriting group that does a word play every Thursday. I enjoy seeing how everyone works out the challenge. Mine grew from a four-line prompt into ten or so trial verses throughout the day. Since it started out like this:

I'm picking up a new old habit
And chilling it on ice
Spinning vinyl memories
In a fool's paradise

I decided to roll with the drinking theme and tried telling a story incorporating the names of alcoholic beverages of various types and brands, along with a distillery or distillery location setting or two. It's proven to be more of a challenge than I expected. It's still choppy and in need of finesse between the verses, so I'm thinking a refrain or prechorus might help tie things together. What do you think so far? If anybody has any suggestions, I'm all ears.

Ever since you left
I'm baked out of my mind
Filling up this vacancy
With every liquid I can find

They call it Southern Comfort
It starts after eight
For every man or woman
Coming by to nurse their pain

They're serving up Painkillers
Fireballs and Rum Swizzles
Topping them off with
Little splashes and a drizzles

Johnnie Walker went and sat right down
Ordered Jim Beam to pour another round
Then let out a Rebel Yell
that echoed all around Heaven Hill

The Prince of Wales showed up
With the Ruby Dutchess
On Moscow Mules hauling
Rattlesnakes and White Russians
In with them rolled a London fog
Filling up Paradise with Salty dogs

Around the time the Prince was falling down
We passed around his Royal Crown
(Wanting to lead up to some crazy late night bar chaos)

(^^ edited)

Damn the weather
Called out Tom Collins
I'd rather see it dark and stormy
Sipping on a Long Island

. . . to be continued . . .
« Last Edit: July 02, 2017, 04:08:59 AM by Jenna »

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« Reply #1 on: June 26, 2017, 12:01:54 PM »
The Prince of Wales showed up
With the Ruby Dutchess
On Moscow Mules hauling
Rattlesnakes and White Russians
In with them rolled a London fog
Filling up Paradise with Salty dogs

Thats your chorus.

I like the idea you have here, distillery location, sometimes with verses you can take the best lines from what you write and put them together, in other words take what the song needs but its not a song yet if you know what i mean   ???

Its your flow and as Bin would say "I like the taste of this"   ;D

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« Reply #2 on: June 26, 2017, 04:37:27 PM »
 :D Definitely not a song yet. It may never get to that stage, although it's been fun trying to piece the puzzle together. I'm picturing a peppy tune for the bar patrons to enjoy after ten.

May I ask why you'd choose that verse for the chorus?

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« Reply #3 on: June 26, 2017, 06:03:09 PM »
:D Definitely not a song yet. It may never get to that stage, although it's been fun trying to piece the puzzle together. I'm picturing a peppy tune for the bar patrons to enjoy after ten.

May I ask why you'd choose that verse for the chorus?


Prince of Wales Ruby Dutchess Moscow Mules hauling, Rattlesnakes and White Russians Paradise with Salty dogs and sure go ahead throw a London fog in there as well, mix them all together and by god i be doing cartwheels across the dance floor.

You can mix me a drink anytime, have to say has to be one of the best chorus out there, but its your call.

Country rock barn dancing style im hearing and if you're looking for backing singers count me in, thats if im still standing after all that  ;D   ;D

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« Reply #4 on: June 26, 2017, 06:39:22 PM »
I'd love to see that!

On edit: I've changed the title and focus of this post to see if we can get a group collaboration project going. Clearly, it's still in the lyric writing phase, but I think with all of the talent here on this board we could turn it into a multinational party hit that plays in every English-speaking bar while the patrons sing along swaying with drinks in hand. What say you? Can we pool together and write a killer tune that every bar wants to play on their jukeboxes?

Oldbutyet is hearing it as country rock, and I'm sort of hearing it the same - starting out slow and sad and then twisting into an upbeat rock-style song - sort of like "Prop me up Against the Jukebox if I Die."

I've collected a lot of drink/cocktail names and have started sorting them into groups like characters, animals, places, etc.

Here they are (not done sorting yet, so sorry for the current state of chaos):

Animals

Monkey bite
Gorilla fart
Duck fart
Rattlesnake
Missouri mule
Salty dog
Greyhound
Bloodhound
Bee's knees
 horses neck
Grey goose
Wild turkey
Characters

Tom Collins
Shirley Temple
Caribou Lou
Harvey Wallbanger
Bobby Burns
John Collins
Black Russians
Green Russians
White Russians
Prince of Wales
Bloody Mary
Ruby Duchess
Jackson Five
Daisy
Pink Lady Tom and Jerry
Alexander
Brokeback shooter
Evan Williams
Jack Daniels
Jim Beam
Johnnie Walker
Jose Cuervo
Four horsemen
Incredible hulk
Jack rose
Zombie
Angel face
Places

Alabama slammer
Moonwalk
Sex on the beach
Cape cod
Blue lagoon
Between the sheets
London fog
Southern candy
French connection
Paradise
Long Island ice tea
Redneck prairie fire
Windsor
Canadian Mist
Canadian Club
Whiskeys

Jack daniel;s
Crown royal
Jim beam
Fireball
Seagram's 7 crown
Jameson irish
Black velvet
Johnnie walker
Maker's mark
Southern comfort
Evan williams
Canadian mist
Dewar's scotch
Canadian club
Kessler
Seagram's vo
Wild turkey
Rich and rare
Windsor
Vodkas

Smirnoff
Absolut
Khortytsa
Skyy
Grey goose
Moscow mule
Russian standard
Violent

Death in the afternoon
Irish car bomb
Corpse reviver
Gunfire
Earthquake
Bloody mary
Kamikaze
Silver bullet
Flatliner
Hellfire
Brokeback shooter
Flip
Punch
Smash
Shooter
Stinger
Environment

Redneck prairie fire
Damn the weather
20th century
Casino
Bramble
Royal arrival
Sundowner
Hurricane
Mudslide
Sea breeze
Tequila sunrise
Amber moon
Jungle juice
Moonwalk
Other

Tuxedo
Blue blazer
Fuzzy navel
Chi chi
The goldeneye
Pucker up
Flirtini
Lemon drop
Screwdriver
The last word
Hanky-panky
After eight
Laake and Wake
Tequila stuntman
Tequila slammer
Bmw
China white
Luke's prediction
ABC
Geritol
Shrub
Toddy
Fizz
Fix







« Last Edit: June 26, 2017, 09:25:32 PM by Jenna »

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« Reply #5 on: June 28, 2017, 12:43:23 AM »
Here is a drinking song that was going nowhere for me.  You are welcome to cannibalize it if something works for you.  

Fixed the formatting issues, and made some lyrical changes on Saturday July 2.  HTM

It’s a little bit hard to figure out, You know it’s just a little bit tough.
To know how much tequila is too much tequila, and how much tequila's enough.
But, the one I figure without any trouble, - The one thing I always know.
Is when I need just a little bit more... so I’d best get a bottle to go.  

So hard to tell just how much tequila's enough.
You just never know til you know.  
It ain't rocket science but it's pretty damned tough
And you just never know til you know.    
 
You know it’s too little when you can’t forget her
so you drink just a little bit more.  
You know it’s too much when it’s too darned late
and you’re waking up on the floor.

So how much tequila is too much tequila,
and how much tequila's enough?
No easy way to figure it out,
and gettin it wrong can be pretty darned rough.
Not much difference tween one too many and a little too little I know.
So just to be cautious and just to be safe, better get me a bottle to go.    

So hard to tell just how much tequila's enough.
You just never know til you know.  
It ain't rocket science but it's pretty damned tough
And you just never know til you know.    

How much tequila is too much tequila?  And how much tequila's enough?            

You know it’s too little when you can’t forget her
so you drink just a little bit more.
You know it’s too much when it’s too darned late
and you’re waking up on the floor.

It's so hard to tell just how much tequila's enough.  
You just never know til you know.  
It ain't rocket science, but it's pretty damned tough
and you just never know til you know.                                                                                                                                              
But you know it’s too little when you can’t forget her
so you drink just a little bit more.
You don’t know it’s too much until it’s too darned late
and you’re waking up on the floor.
« Last Edit: July 02, 2017, 09:54:00 AM by hardtwistmusic »
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« Reply #6 on: June 28, 2017, 10:52:22 PM »
Hardtwistmusic - why I did this I don't know. All I know is I did. But anyway...I decided to put some of your lyrics to some chords and this is the result https://www.audiomack.com/song/darren1664/tequila :P

Not a great recording or track so I hope I haven't offended you or your lyrics but was fun writing music to words for a change (normally write the other way about). Anyway was just a music fart and thought I'd share :P (Nice lyrics though :))

Edit: Sorry Jenna I completely hijacked your thread. Just posting now quickly to say that I like the idea of this and have been thinking on it and will check in tomorrow with a proper reply (Sorry just got completely sidetracked :P)
« Last Edit: June 28, 2017, 11:24:28 PM by Darren1664 »

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« Reply #7 on: June 29, 2017, 10:58:08 PM »
Hardtwistmusic - why I did this I don't know. All I know is I did. But anyway...I decided to put some of your lyrics to some chords and this is the result https://www.audiomack.com/song/darren1664/tequila :P

Not a great recording or track so I hope I haven't offended you or your lyrics but was fun writing music to words for a change (normally write the other way about). Anyway was just a music fart and thought I'd share :P (Nice lyrics though :))

Edit: Sorry Jenna I completely hijacked your thread. Just posting now quickly to say that I like the idea of this and have been thinking on it and will check in tomorrow with a proper reply (Sorry just got completely sidetracked :P)

I loved what you did with this.  I thought your vocal was perfect for the song.  If you want to run with this and fine tune it, feel free.  As long as you credit me for my work on the lyrics, you're free to do anything you want with this.  And if (when you are done) you want to send me the chords, I could add some other instrumentation (if you want.) 

If you want to run with this, consider it your song with no limitations except the need to credit me for the lyrics.
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« Reply #8 on: June 30, 2017, 01:00:47 PM »

Canadian Club + Jungle juice = Gorilla fart  ;D

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« Reply #9 on: July 01, 2017, 06:01:11 PM »

 Hey guys,

 Don't know how far you've got with this, but if you're
 still looking for a backing track.  I've got this that might
 suit.

 https://soundcloud.com/binladeda/spin-the-bottle/s-8U5TP

 It still needs a lot of work, but I think it's ready for some
 lyrics/vocals. Let me know if you want it. ;D

 
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« Reply #10 on: July 01, 2017, 07:34:25 PM »

 Hey guys,

 Don't know how far you've got with this, but if you're
 still looking for a backing track.  I've got this that might
 suit.

 https://soundcloud.com/binladeda/spin-the-bottle/s-8U5TP

 It still needs a lot of work, but I think it's ready for some
 lyrics/vocals. Let me know if you want it. ;D

 

I listened, then went back to read the lyric.  It's a perfect fit. 
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« Reply #11 on: July 02, 2017, 12:26:01 AM »
No offend to later post but Jenna has the call here  8)

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« Reply #12 on: July 02, 2017, 02:40:25 AM »
Me? Last call? Woot! Haha. I'd be more comfortable if someone with more experience would take the lead on putting it all together if it goes that direction. I love the backing track! It is a perfect fit! It's got a  great Looooziana Bayou feel to it. And love the too much tequila song! I could see people swaying and singing that with drinks in hand, no problem.

Sorry I disappeared after posting this. I've been putting my all into learning the keyboard, most of which involved maddening technical issues. I picked up a midi keyboard on Ebay and sadly it's not fully functional as described in the listing, but it took me a good week or so to figure out that the problem wasn't with my system but the keyboard itself. I'll be getting a refund on it and the seller told me just to keep it with apologies, so that was a nice bonus.

Hijacked thread? Nah. It's all good. Says the ------> Queen of thread hijacks!

Party on! I was just about to chill for the evening, and now that backing track has me wanting to get up and boogie.



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« Reply #13 on: July 02, 2017, 04:12:25 AM »

Canadian Club + Jungle juice = Gorilla fart  ;D

 :D For realz? We have a tent for you situated downwind from the camp. ;)

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« Reply #14 on: July 02, 2017, 08:40:56 AM »
Me? Last call? Woot! Haha. I'd be more comfortable if someone with more experience would take the lead on putting it all together if it goes that direction. I love the backing track! It is a perfect fit! It's got a  great Looooziana Bayou feel to it. And love the too much tequila song! I could see people swaying and singing that with drinks in hand, no problem.

Sorry I disappeared after posting this. I've been putting my all into learning the keyboard, most of which involved maddening technical issues. I picked up a midi keyboard on Ebay and sadly it's not fully functional as described in the listing, but it took me a good week or so to figure out that the problem wasn't with my system but the keyboard itself. I'll be getting a refund on it and the seller told me just to keep it with apologies, so that was a nice bonus.

Hijacked thread? Nah. It's all good. Says the ------> Queen of thread hijacks!

Party on! I was just about to chill for the evening, and now that backing track has me wanting to get up and boogie.




Canadian Club + Jungle juice = Gorilla fart  ;D

 :D For realz? We have a tent for you situated downwind from the camp. ;)

First of all group collaboration project has been try and tested on these songwriter forums in the past and has never amount to anything worth talking about, i mean group collaboration, but we're going to put that where it belongs for the moment might need it later as a cocktail drink, a hangover cure   ;D

You already have experience replying so thats a great start, put your lyrics together dont have to be in order of rules and whatever, just lay them out so we can all see whatever flow takes us.

Gorilla fart, is that a hangover cure or just the end of the night playing piano   ;D  sounds like a great end to a party   8)  okay i wont mention the fridge no more   ;D  you got room for us all Jenna    8)