[Oldbutyet]

Okay guys sounds nice but too nice too sweety, Davy can you just record this with lead guitar only so we can hear that flowing ROCK sound, let your fingers flow slide whatever, Paul can you do the same with piano and Bin, im no good with this musician language but can you post the chords, i got an idea  

There is definitely a place in this song for your narration style vocals Pat,please don't think I've been blanking you,I'm just looking for the right place. It may be a part at the start,put in before the kick off..a break in the high diddle diddle,or at the end. We'll know when it happens,so keep your powder dry dude.  

Hey Davy

I'm sorry i made you think you been blinking me out, believe me not the case at all, i guess what i was trying to say in my humorous way is that the lyrics has change from the first post of lyrics that Jenna posted, i could explain but honestly i don't want to cause any problems, if i can help out with vocals i be delighted, peace  

Correct. Trying to get a better flow and matchup with the music for the vocalist while developing a storyline at the same time. It's very much in flux. I was under the impression the group was not happy with the original, and to be honest I wasn't planning that to be the final version. The idea was to let it evolve as we went along. Is that okay? I think it would be impossible to hit it right with the first go around, especially for someone as green as myself. I was also hoping for more feedback on the lyrics, as in collaboration/editing/etc. I have no toes left, so no worries about stepping on them. Chainsaw accident.  

Does anyone have a full-length tab/score/sketch worked out for the music track? Knowing the number of measures to each section and the chord progressions of them would be really helpful. I've never written lyrics to fit music before and thought it was typically done the other way around so the music supported the lyrics. I'm just a little wet behind the ears it seems.

Welcome to the studio call online, the flow is going somewhere 

[Skub]

 Hey  guys, 

 I see the party is picking up the pace, now the two front men
 have the stems

 Love the latest demo. I'm going to attempt a bit of slide for
 the solo section. I like the guitar that Skub has put there, but
 if I was to be brutally honest   I think it starts better than it
 ends   it would be nice to have guitar/slide/piano options
 to choose from there anyway.....maybe

 Wise words from Skub regarding the length.  It's already on it's
 limit, if not too long. But, it ain't misbehaving yet Still keeps
 attention....my arse was not dragged But we should be looking
 at losing some time....not adding any

 Just my thoughts guys...it's all subjective, and it's all good

 I doff my musical hat to you all (deep bow of gratitude) 

Yo Bin. 

I have an idea for the ending,just waiting for a reply from Pat. 

[Skub]

Does anyone have a full-length tab/score/sketch worked out for the music track? Knowing the number of measures to each section and the chord progressions of them would be really helpful. I've never written lyrics to fit music before and thought it was typically done the other way around so the music supported the lyrics. I'm just a little wet behind the ears it seems.

Dinnae fash yersel kid! (Don't worry,in plain speak  )

As the song currently sits Jenna,all we need lyric wise is lyrics for the passage from 2.49 to 3.27. I just have the previous lyrics repeating there at the moment,but aside from other tweaks you wish to make,that's all we need. 

[Skub]

Song overview as it currently sits.

The highlighted parts are areas still open to being either a verse or solos.

Intro

Repeat intro when band kicks in.

Verse

Pre chorus

Room here for either another verse or piano/Paul/Bin solo

Chorus x 2

Guitar solo

Verse

Pre chorus

Room here for either another verse or piano/Paul/Bin solo

Chorus to end

End (possible idea using Pat on a fade out)

[Oldbutyet]

 Hey  guys, 

 I see the party is picking up the pace, now the two front men
 have the stems

 Love the latest demo. I'm going to attempt a bit of slide for
 the solo section. I like the guitar that Skub has put there, but
 if I was to be brutally honest   I think it starts better than it
 ends   it would be nice to have guitar/slide/piano options
 to choose from there anyway.....maybe

 Wise words from Skub regarding the length.  It's already on it's
 limit, if not too long. But, it ain't misbehaving yet Still keeps
 attention....my arse was not dragged But we should be looking
 at losing some time....not adding any

 Just my thoughts guys...it's all subjective, and it's all good

 I doff my musical hat to you all (deep bow of gratitude) 

Yo Bin. 

I have an idea for the ending,just waiting for a reply from Pat. 

Damn it guys, does this mean i get my own limousine        but i have to tell you all, after all these cocktails (are we still drinking cocktails by the way) anyway, after all this drinking im going to need a driver, just hope she leaves that chainsaw at home   

Okay Davy just need to find the mic, its down here on this floor somewhere, man im looking forward to a cool pint of stout after all this   

[Paulski]

Hey all - my what interest there seems to be in this thread 

Jenna - I like your latest stab at the lyrics BUT they don't fit bin's backing track. At least I can't make them fit  So if we use them we're going to need another backdrop!

Having said that, and at the risk of p*ssing you off  I took a hacksaw to them and came up with what I think will fit the track. Subject to approval by the crowd and your good self of course:

Fool's Paradise

Intro verse slow (maybe spoken by the Pat-ster):

I've gone back to my old habits
Since you put my heart on ice
I'm filling up the hole you left
With some good old friends of mine...

{vs 1}
Well I got this half-baked feeling
And my brain is getting fried
The party's overheating
At the "Fool's Paradise"

{dunna bore us get to the chorus.. }
I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise

Johnny Walker - takes a seat
"Party On!" He says to me
From Jimmy Beam - comes a Rebel Yell
So loud it echoes round Heaven Hill
Jackie Daniels takes the stage
He grabs a mic and starts to sing

I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise

I know this party's gonna end
I'll get abandoned by my friends
We can patch it up, but until then
That old hole needs fillin' again..

So I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise
At the Fool's Paradise

[Oldbutyet]

Okay Davy PM sent with link.

Sorry was i suppose to go public with it.

Theres seem to be lyrics coming from everywhere here, my head starting to hurt guys     

[Skub]

Latest version,now with added Pat. 

https://soundcloud.com/skub1955/spin-the-bottle-v1/s-Hx7BA

[pompeyjazz]

This is sounding good guys 

[Jenna]

Hey all - my what interest there seems to be in this thread  

Jenna - I like your latest stab at the lyrics BUT they don't fit bin's backing track. At least I can't make them fit   So if we use them we're going to need another backdrop!

Having said that, and at the risk of p*ssing you off   I took a hacksaw to them and came up with what I think will fit the track. Subject to approval by the crowd and your good self of course:

Fool's Paradise

Intro verse slow (maybe spoken by the Pat-ster):

I've gone back to my old habits
Since you put my heart on ice
I'm filling up the hole you left
With some good old friends of mine...

{vs 1}
Well I got this half-baked feeling
And my brain is getting fried
The party's overheating
At the "Fool's Paradise"

{dunna bore us get to the chorus.. }
I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise

Johnny Walker - takes a seat
"Party On!" He says to me
From Jimmy Beam - comes a Rebel Yell
So loud it echoes round Heaven Hill
Jackie Daniels takes the stage
He grabs a mic and starts to sing

I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise

I know this party's gonna end
I'll get abandoned by my friends
We can patch it up, but until then
That old hole needs fillin' again..

So I'll be dancing through the night
With every spirit I can find
At the Fool's Paradise
At the Fool's Paradise

Yes! I really like what you've done with them. That was my problem too, unable to fit them to the track. The second stab was a big improvement on the original idea. What are the chances we can try the second revision with another musical backing? I may work on that on the side here and there just for fun to see what I can do with it.

But for this track, I bow in the presence of greatness. Where's the prostrating emoji when you need it? I found it a real challenge to construct a song that would fit the pattern of the backing track. The chorus seems a little short, and maybe that's what had me stumped. All I know is that it was late and things weren't coming together for some inexplicable reason until I started counting the measures and chord changes. In either case, it was a good experience for training the ear.

And the intro? Bam! Nailed. I also love the end after the outro saying the party will end. The music stops. Pat comes in with his favorite lines in conversational form. I think we've got it together now. Great stuff, guys. I look forward to hearing it all put together when the time comes.

Very happy with the outcome so far.  

[Paulski]

Hey Jenna

Wow - that's some analysis - didn't think of any of that TBH but I'm glad you like it 
And of course it's subject to change if anyone has suggs 

Skub - had a listen to the latest - it's getting there Needs a haircut though! Don't ya know brush cuts R back in style for C&W music? 

Pat - now that's what I call an OUTRO! 

cheers guys
Paul

[Jenna]

Hey Jenna

Wow - that's some analysis - didn't think of any of that TBH but I'm glad you like it 
And of course it's subject to change if anyone has suggs 

Skub - had a listen to the latest - it's getting there Needs a haircut though! Don't ya know brush cuts R back in style for C&W music? 

Pat - now that's what I call an OUTRO! 

cheers guys
Paul

Meh. You're just one of those naturals with a good ear for it all. -> envy 

[Oldbutyet]

This is sounding good guys 

Hey Pompey we're just having a bit fun jamming around now just waiting for that piano player to flow his style, yea yea yeah eh eh ehh yea yea oh yeah 

[Jenna]

Hey Jenna

Wow - that's some analysis - didn't think of any of that TBH but I'm glad you like it 

I guess. And totally wrong! I got something backward, I found out this evening after a review of the material, so it's getting deleted until I get my head straight on it!

 

[Binladeda]

 Sounding good guys 

 Loving the Intro, not sure about the Outro.  Also, think it's a tad too
 long.  BUT it's a band So whatever you guys want is fine by me.
 (notice the way I sidestepped that one)

 Anyway, nice to see us 'herd of cats' getting some direction, from
 Skub .....lion of the mountain   I'm trying to get a mixer/producer
 interested.  So if anyone has any ideas, let me know and I'll send the
 boys round