John Wright : Up-tempo happy song

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Rick trodat

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« on: June 13, 2017, 01:22:51 PM »
https://soundcloud.com/schermer/john-wright

He was John handsome John
Everything was right
Liked to drink at the bar
Stayed up till night
His wife hated him
( it) ended up in a fight
Packed his stuff
And went for a trip
Went out of sight

Did you knew him, his name was John Wright
He left his home when the time was right

Knocked on a yellow door
Bags on the floor
a girl opened up; why you are here for
Can I sleep here tonight, I got no place to go
He smiled and looked at her, going in the flow

Hey you look so familiair
Can I bring you home
I am so alone
I am home alone

ta ta ta

PaulyX

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« Reply #1 on: June 13, 2017, 09:15:05 PM »
Hey, that was thigh-slapping fun... bit like a countrified T-Rex (even your voice sounds a bit like Bolan!).  I like the banjo, slide guitar and whistling in particular and some touches on percussion made me smile.  My only suggestion would be to EQ it to make the lead vocal a bit clearer in the choruses; it gets a bit lost amongst the backing vocals so I don't think I'd understand the words if I didn't have the lyrics.  Great little tune that sets out to enjoy itself and succeeds big time.
It's all too beautiful.

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« Reply #2 on: June 13, 2017, 09:43:52 PM »
Hi Rick,

Loving this track, love the mix of instruments you have, whistling mixes well too.

Kinda country meets T rex,

Brilliant

Andy

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« Reply #3 on: June 14, 2017, 02:19:26 AM »
Nice song!
John Sebastian/Lovin' Spoonful vibe.
It is very happy and very up-beat  ;D ;D
Nice slide guitar too.
Maybe take some of that extra end space and put it on the intro - to give it time to load..

Great work!
Paul

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« Reply #4 on: June 14, 2017, 12:46:12 PM »
Hey Rick.

This gave a lift to my day fo sho!

Quite Marc Bolan in places,he always had that pop boogie thang down pat.

Love the pedal steel licks too.

It's a modern day Mungo Jerry,In the Summertime. In another time this would hit the charts and never be off the radio.

Just great man,ta for the list,it's on my playlist.  8)

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« Reply #5 on: June 14, 2017, 03:32:10 PM »
Nice whistling!  Reminds me a bit of Mungo Jerry...  Not my usual thing but a rather jolly listen none the less.

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« Reply #6 on: June 17, 2017, 09:40:53 PM »
Hey Rick

I really like this, the upbeat style the way you sing but i think some lyric lines could flow better with some minor changes, also im hearing a great hook line "his name was John Wright"

TBH i dont think this song is finish yet but the only changes i think it needs is to get some of your lyric lines flowing better, no doubt about it great upbeat style, also i think Paulski right about adding a intro.

Been listening to your other songs and that instrumental "Life's Door" beautiful, post that next   8)