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Read June 16, 2017, 09:55:11 AM #0
exfairy

That Kiss

I uploaded this to WiP a few months ago but tried to expand, make it better... I don't know. Just general thoughts would be helpful? Smiley

Link: https://soundcloud.com/exfairy/that-kiss-1/s-TyzXk

Lyrics:
I see you on a Tuesday morning
You smile at me from across the room
My heart is giving me a warning
But I'm just so intrigued by you

Cos your smile brings butterflies to my heart
That beats like a ticking clock counting down the days till you'll be mine
Cos I don't think that I've ever felt like this
Wana know that it's me that you'll miss
And that kiss

Next Friday evening we're now friends
And I can't imagine this to end
Over a meal you look at me
And for the first time I feel like somebody

CH

I think I like you, do you like me too?
I hope that you'll choose me x2

CH
 
Read June 16, 2017, 12:11:18 PM #1
Kristupas

Re: That Kiss

I love the song movement melodically and lyrically (it goes up all along).
Beautiful voice, and good use of backing during chorus!

It really is catchy, do you plan on making a richer arrangement(besides ukulele and something else in the back), cause it is really nice, and something I find pleasant to listen to, I just personally am not a big fan of ukulele.
 
Read June 16, 2017, 02:22:57 PM #2
TimCurtis

Re: That Kiss

Lovely song.  Nice harmonies and the simplicity of it all, yet not so simple when I listen a bit deeper.  Makes me feel all warm and gooey. Smiley
 
Read June 18, 2017, 04:53:20 PM #3
PaulyX

Re: That Kiss

Sweet song.  Your voice harmonises well I thought.
I liked the home-made feel to it... are you drumming on a table or something for the percussion?  It all feels genuine and home-spun on account of that.
Sounds like you have a strong voice - to me it sounded like you gained confidence as the song went on.  The first verse sounded a little tentative / unsure of yourself but I didn't feel that by the end.  Maybe re-sing the first half with the same attitude?


It's all too beautiful.
 
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