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Read June 15, 2017, 06:08:55 PM #0
Morefrog Jones

Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

So this is my summer competition entry -
I was hoping for for a fun/up to date/catchy indie summer dance tune.

Can't Seem to get the mix right on the vocals -
But I'm Loving the song myself - really enjoyed doing this one.
Think it needs a producer Wink

https://soundcloud.com/morefrog-jones/shake-your-booty-like-j-lo

Lyrics

The Sun Is Shining
Looks Like Summertime is Here At Last
The Heat Is Rising
Looks Like The Winter Blues Are In The Past
You Caught Me Peeping
While We Were Down at The Beach Today.
And Now Its Evening
How Strange Our Paths Have Crossed Again.

So lets See what You've Got On The Dance Floor
I Want To See You Shake Your Booty Like J-LO
So lets See what You've Got On The Dance Floor
I Want To See You Shake Your Booty Like J-LO

Summer Passions
Ive Seen The Way You've Been Checking Me Out
Its Time For Action
This Is No Time To Have Some Doubts
No Words Are Needed
No Time For Witty Repartee
Looks Like Were On Here
But I Have One Last Enquiry.

So lets See what You've Got On The Dance Floor
I Want To See You Shake Your Booty Like J-LO
So lets See what You've Got On The Dance Floor
I Want To See You Shake Your Booty Like J-LO

I Move In Closer
Looks Like Nothing Gonna Stop Us Now.
I Touch Your Shoulder
You Are The Hottest Girl Around
The Beat Is Pumping
Can I Make This Last Appeal
The Base Is Thumping
Time For Us To Seal The Deal.

So lets See what You've Got On The Dance Floor
I Want To See You Shake Your Booty Like J-LO
So lets See what You've Got On The Dance Floor
I Want To See You Shake Your Booty Like J-LO X 2

Thanks For Listening
« Last Edit: June 16, 2017, 12:50:36 PM by Morefrog Jones »
 
Read June 16, 2017, 02:41:01 PM #1
TimCurtis

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

Doing this at work, so luckily no one was around when I clicked on the link and JLo's arse took over my screen!!! Cheesy

Nice bit of classic indie-house - can hear a bit of the Primals and Jagwa Ma in there.  A nice pumping track, so I think you hit your remit pretty damn accurately.  Excellent, I reckon, but then I do like this sort of thing.... Wink
 
Read June 16, 2017, 10:54:33 PM #2
Skub

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

Yo MFJ

This wouldn't be out of place if played by the DJ at a wedding bash. It sure stomps along.

My only quibble would be perhaps it's a bit long,but I'm into short songs at the moment,so maybe it's just me.

Consider my booty well shaken.  Cool
 
Read June 17, 2017, 05:25:23 AM #3
TheButcher

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

Hi;

The song itself is very entertaining; made me smile (which is kinda cool in these dark days)

"shake your booty like j lo" haha

But yes; mix could be improved.

Every element needs to be more aggressive; best thing you can do, is listen carefully to songs that are kinda similar to yours and try to simulate the sound of elements like BD etc. Pick a song that has the same tempo.
So, for example, pick a song like "pokerface" - you can say what you want about that song - but the mix kicks ass Smiley
good luck
« Last Edit: June 17, 2017, 10:52:22 AM by TheButcher »

 
Read June 17, 2017, 10:41:33 AM #4
tina m

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

I absolutely loved the beat in this, you do conjure up some fantastic rhythmic beats!
but I wasnt sure the melody worked so well,  & I wondered if the original chords had got mixed out or submerged in the dance treatment?
The lyrics sounded a bit dated ...I know J-LOs derriere has been around a long time now ...almost as long as a planet...& probably weighs as much! but there must be a better bottom to sing about by now!
But anyway I admire your desire to go modern & clubby ....you just need some moron like DJ Khaled shouting 'This is DJ Khaled', as he always does so inspiringly & everyone will love it  Smiley


Tell me Im wonderful & I ll be nice to you Smiley
 
Read June 17, 2017, 11:38:00 AM #5
Morefrog Jones

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

I absolutely loved the beat in this, you do conjure up some fantastic rhythmic beats!
but I wasnt sure the melody worked so well,  & I wondered if the original chords had got mixed out or submerged in the dance treatment?
The lyrics sounded a bit dated ...I know J-LOs derriere has been around a long time now ...almost as long as a planet...& probably weighs as much! but there must be a better bottom to sing about by now!
But anyway I admire your desire to go modern & clubby ....you just need some moron like DJ Khaled shouting 'This is DJ Khaled', as he always does so inspiringly & everyone will love it  Smiley


Yes I think you are right that original chords got lost - as For the song I was inspired to recreate something like Marvin Gaye & get it on - or move like Jagger - One whos dead and the other who is over 70 - LOL. Grin Grin Grin Grin

Anyway this is defiantly a producers song - Of which I am not  Sad
I think this is one that has potential in the right hands.

 
Read June 18, 2017, 02:27:46 PM #6
Yodasdad

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

Took me a while to review this as I got distracted by the picture.

A potential Ibiza anthem in the making.

I like the percussion driven backing.

The vocals are not bad but I know what you mean, they haven't quite got that in your face pizzaz of a modern dance track do they.

Apart from that the only other thing I would say is that the chorus melody is quite similar to that of the verse, might need a bit more of a hooky stonka.

Good work though, lots of potential for this.

Yodasdad
 
Read June 18, 2017, 02:50:41 PM #7
ScottLevi

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

Hey Morefrog

Great lyrics; simple, relatable and good flow - just what a track like this needs.

There's good progression and I like how well each verse leads I to the chorus. Vocal levels seemed well through my earphones but did feel a little distant through my cheap Bluetooth speaker xD.

I enjoyed the progression in the story and the teardown/build-up.

Only suggestion would be a bit more of a sporadic breakdown to break the song a bit more. I think it might be "Give up on Me" which has a cool trumpety sound drop in - think something similar would work wonders here.

Really enjoyable, leaps forward from your last clubby attempt imo.

All the best,
Scott


 
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Read June 18, 2017, 04:37:49 PM #8
PaulyX

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

I don't know how J-Lo shakes her booty, but this is a good reason to read up.
This is infectious man.  My fave bits are when the beat kicks back in after dropping away, for example at around 54 secs and subsequent choruses.  I like your Bobby Gillespie-style vocals too.  A nice piece of beat-driven beach-front club fun.


It's all too beautiful.
 
Read June 26, 2017, 07:17:38 PM #9
Jambrains

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

Good groove but I think it needs more bottom end, particularly kick to really get going.
Not a genre I'm very familiar but too me it sounds like it has potential but it sound a bit like it lacks that power/"bigness" that (at least I) associate with this kind of track if that made any sense?
Now, this may just me being an old dinosaur but I cannot really get the chords and the melody to fit quite together, like the vocals was been recorde to a, at least partially, different backing?
Or maybe I'm just tone deaf  Grin
So summary, def potential but not quite there yet.


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Read June 29, 2017, 01:12:29 AM #10
Paulski

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

I can't possibly offer anything here.
Disco/house is totally not my cuppa but I will say the lead vocals are really good and the soundcloud image is nice.  Grin Grin

Paul
 
Read June 29, 2017, 09:38:33 AM #11
Binladeda

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)


 Hi,

 Great movement.  Loved the chorus. Thought the verse needed something more
 below the belt to suit your vocal. More bollox  Grin Grin Your vocal has an attitude
 that doesn't quite suit the clean/auto electro sound in the verse. Loved that background
 guitar towards the end......clever Grin Grin

 Good luck....



Nowt as queer as folk...........my gran
 
Read June 30, 2017, 07:18:02 AM #12
Kristupas

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

Funny chorus idea, it had this kind of middle-eastern vibe in it, maybe because of the synth Smiley

Maybe for a dance track the beginning was a bit too slow ?
For my taste, dance track could be shorter, and then you wouldn't have too remove so much in the beginning to remove possible monotony.

But later on it sounded nice, quirky, 'summery', not a lot of bass though(but that is my taste, I guess).

In general fun track to listen too (didn't want to see the picture :DD )

Cheers,

Kris
 
Read July 02, 2017, 02:39:43 AM #13
CaliaMoko

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

Reading through the lyric, I couldn't imagine how this would fit to a melody but, listening next, I see it fits a melody just fine. Your rhyme scheme is consistent and some of the rhymes are quite distant. If you're into prosody, you must be thinking this is a very shaky possibility, a feeling supported by the irregular rhythms of the verse lines and the distant rhymes.

It's fun to analyze how the prosody tells the story...the first verse has one set of perfect rhymes, two sets of near rhymes, and one set of a fairly distant rhyme. So our protagonist is feeling pretty sure of himself, but not 100% on solid ground. The second verse has no perfect rhymes, two sets of reasonably near rhymes, and two sets of distant rhymes. So we can assume he didn't get an immediate positive response, so he's feeling a lot less sure of himself. The last verse has two sets of perfect rhymes and two sets of near rhymes. He must have gotten at least a little bit of a positive response and is feeling a lot more sure of the outcome now, although not quite 100%.

I try really hard not to consider production or performance skills when judging for challenges (or SOTM), but I'll say I do like how you put this together. It does end kind of abruptly, though.

Vicki
 
Read July 03, 2017, 10:01:21 PM #14
PaulAds

Re: Shake Your Booty Like J-LO (Summer Competition Entry)

my elderly parents (90 and 87) always called the J2O drinks that my kids used to like "J-LO" by mistake

anything dancy like this makes me feel a bit the same...as if the world has gone whizzing past me and i no longer understand it...like the time my granny won a digital clock and when i set it to the correct time (14:40) for her - she said "that's too many...it should only go up to 12...and half past"

pounding and quite catchy...bags of spirit and a bit of a snarl in the vocal which i really liked...i'd maybe have liked to have heard something to have shaken it up a little more at some point...but pretty groovy nonetheless


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