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Read June 15, 2017, 05:24:08 PM #0
ScottLevi

Aeroplane Song - Summer Competition Entry

Hey hey,

First off, not looking for reviews on this at all, I haven't earnt them and can't be sure to return the favour anytime soon.

That said I probably shouldn't be posting this at all, but I really want to be part of the Summer Competition after narrowly missing out on post count during last year's Halloween. Hopefully give me a push to make more time to review the other entries.

Also no problem if this is decided non-eligible, due to lack of pulse. I'm being cheeky as is.

I've lost my home studio capability, so this straight-to-soundcloud recording in a Tenerife apartment bathroom is the best I can do (poor effort I know 😵)

Wrote the lyrics on the plane over and put some simple chords together on my uke (good for travelling if nothing else).

Hope some may enjoy

https://soundcloud.com/namelessmc/summer-aeroplane-song

Chorus
Blue wrinkled leather lays still beneath us,
As shadows crawl through faded yellow,
We pray the sky don't drop-release us,
To meet our fate with what's below

A carpet of white,
Floats above the mountain peaks,
Reflecting back the light,
Full of colour and heat

The clouds lose pace,
And green and brown protrude,
With elegance and grace,
To paint this lovely view

Chorus

I see infinite canyons,
Reflecting back the sun,
It's beautifully random,
And naturally done

Layers of land,
Gradiate the horizon,
Until we pass the sand,
And the it all starts to whiten

Chorus

Much love,
Scottay
« Last Edit: June 15, 2017, 05:26:36 PM by ScottLevi »

 
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Read June 15, 2017, 07:33:10 PM #1
Martinswede

Re: Aeroplane Song - Summer Competition Entry

Hi!

Personally I think the (only) good thing about competitions like this one
are that they spur your creativity.

It got to me and it seems like it's got to you too.

Have a good summer!

Martin
 
Read June 17, 2017, 07:07:26 PM #2
tina m

Re: Aeroplane Song - Summer Competition Entry

This is the mark of a diehard songwriter Scott...turning a holiday flight into a set of artistic lyrics & then recording a song in the hotel bathroom with a contraband guitar youve smuggled thru customs!
& all done while your supposed to be clubbing & drinking & sunbathing, if I can just remind you! Smiley
The lyrics were very poetic & pastoral & sounded quite unique done in your urban rap style,
I would like to hear this with some more instruments added



Tell me Im wonderful & I ll be nice to you Smiley
 
Read June 17, 2017, 08:23:05 PM #3
PaulAds

Re: Aeroplane Song - Summer Competition Entry

Hey, Scott...

Nice set of lyrics done in your own individual style

Have a great holiday  Smiley


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Read June 17, 2017, 09:15:38 PM #4
Oldbutyet

Re: Aeroplane Song - Summer Competition Entry

Hey hey Scott.

You got style Man   Cool   summer festival style, great lyrics (so deep man) space the final frontier there's no where else to go my friend, really great to hear your style again.

Enjoy your holiday its doing you good, Great song   Cool
 
Read June 18, 2017, 04:12:50 PM #5
PaulyX

Re: Aeroplane Song - Summer Competition Entry

Hey Scottay, wow, this is so unique.  I really love the lyrics... there's something really magical about gazing out of a plane window isn't there?  Like getting a little glimpse of an alternative universe that is just floating 30,000 ft above our heads.
I had no idea what the track would sound like from the lyrics, which I think is a good thing.  I think it does work in a cool off-kilter way with just the uke and rap - totally unexpected! (Have you checked out Mr B the Gentleman Rhymer by the way?  See YouTube.  He's the grand master of "chap-hop" and sounds a bit like this.)  Equally though I'd like to hear a version of this with loads more going on... big beats and industrial bass.
Enjoy your holiday and keep writing!  Good luck in the comp!


It's all too beautiful.
 
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