[Marthy]

Hi everyone I'm marthy I'm Italian and this is the first time I post some on here.
I just wrote a song I've got the beat etc but I'm a little afraid but lyrics
You know Italian language is full of metaphoric words and full of images so I don't know if my lyrics are ok in English
That's why I'm posting here
I'd need someone's help to see if I'm on the right way or I'm just writing s*** lol

[Gill]

Hi, yes I'd like to help. Do you want to PM the message instead to me?

[hardtwistmusic]

Hi everyone I'm marthy I'm Italian and this is the first time I post some on here.
I just wrote a song I've got the beat etc but I'm a little afraid but lyrics
You know Italian language is full of metaphoric words and full of images so I don't know if my lyrics are ok in English
That's why I'm posting here
I'd need someone's help to see if I'm on the right way or I'm just writing s*** lol

Why don't you post your lyrics and let all of us help you?   I post a lot of lyrics here, and get help from accomplished lyric writers here all the time.  And it always helps my lyrics.

I help a lot of other lyricists here also.  None of us ever asks for credit.  It could be that you DO need a collaborator.  But it could be that you do not. . . that you just need a little help "Englishizing" the lyrics. 

It costs nothing (in terms of song credit) to find out here.  It's part of what makes this forum the best on the internet.  It's why I'm here.   

[Marthy]

 Thank you so much!!!
Song's about this person who's fighting against cancer 
And I talk like I'd be him


Head up all I see are dark skies
Only few stars that barely shine 
I can't face this storm that is coming 
I can't do it by my own 
Don't know where to go
I'm running oh 
Im.running so fast
It's hard to breathe this monster's still behind me 
It's trying to throw me away from here 
But im.not ready to go  
I wanna stay
I want to get back to my normal life 
To know that I survived and everything's still alright 
Im.not asking more can I have it so?!

Chorus I'm still working on it 

Hands up all I see are new skyes 
I can touch these stars that are lightning my new life
I'd put myself together 
I won that bad war 
I'll live forever

I'm alive yea I said I'm alive
I just burned all of the demons I had inside 
I have found my peace 
I'm not lost anymore 
It's my time to come back home 


Thank you all for helping me

[hardtwistmusic]

Here is some help with "Englishizing" this lyric.  Others will probably also lend a hand.


Head I look up. All I see are dark skies.
Only Just a few stars that barely shine
I can't face this storm that is coming
I can't do it by on my own

Don't know where to go
I'm running oh (oh oh oh)
I"m running so fast
It's hard to breathe
this monster's still behind me

It's trying to drag throw me away from here
But I'm not ready to go  
I wanna stay.  
I want to get back to my normal life
To know that I survived
and everything's still alright
I 'm not asking won't ask for more
can I have it be so?!

Chorus I'm still working on it

Hands I gaze up.  All I see are new skys
I can touch these stars that are lightning my new life
I'll put pull myself together
I won that bad awful war
Now it feels like I  'll could live forever

I'm alive yeah I said I'm alive
I just burned all of out the demons I had inside
I have found my peace
I'm not lost anymore
It's finally my time for me to come back home

All these are only suggestions.  Some of them probably won't work with the music you are planning to use.  Use what you like and wait for better suggestions from others on the rest.  Good luck.  

I like the lyric a lot.  I'm glad you posted it.

[Marthy]

Here is some help with "Englishizing" this lyric.  Others will probably also lend a hand.


Head I look up. All I see are dark skies.
Only Just a few stars that barely shine
I can't face this storm that is coming
I can't do it by on my own

Don't know where to go
I'm running oh (oh oh oh)
I"m running so fast
It's hard to breathe
this monster's still behind me

It's trying to drag throw me away from here
But I'm not ready to go  
I wanna stay.  
I want to get back to my normal life
To know that I survived
and everything's still alright
I 'm not asking won't ask for more
can I have it be so?!

Chorus I'm still working on it

Hands I gaze up.  All I see are new skys
I can touch these stars that are lightning my new life
I'll put pull myself together
I won that bad awful war
Now it feels like I  'll could live forever

I'm alive yeah I said I'm alive
I just burned all of out the demons I had inside
I have found my peace
I'm not lost anymore
It's finally my time for me to come back home

All these are only suggestions.  Some of them probably won't work with the music you are planning to use.  Use what you like and wait for better suggestions from others on the rest.  Good luck.  

I like the lyric a lot.  I'm glad you posted it.

Thank You so much...i really appreciate your help a lot.
God bless you thank you again xx marthy

[hardtwistmusic]

I was happy to be of help.  Hopefully, you can use some of that.