[kaalbas]

Hey everyone

I'm writing a 80s metal song. I would really appriciate if someone could help me with the grammar. English isn't my first laungage.

Thanks

Michael

She keeps me up all night

Verse 1

Always thinking about her (bout her)
I'm in to deep
Feel like a wreck in the morning (morning)
Cause I never get no sleep

Walk around all Day long
Wating for a chance
To get her body close to mine
For a little, for a little romance

Pre chorus

Every night when we go to bed
Thoughts comes rushing through my head

Chorus

All night. All night
Keep on fighting with the devil inside
All night. All night
Toss and turn till the morning light
Everytime she's near. I start to lose control
My heart's defeated
I surrender my soul
All night. All night
She keeps me up all night

Verse 2

Can't resist her body (body)
She's pulling me in
Almost like she's magnetic (netic)
Gotta touch her warm soft skin

Giving in to temptation
I'm losing the fight
Forbidden fruit, but I want it
Just wonna have, have one bite

Pre chorus, chorus, instrumental bridge, solo, chorus,

[Gill]

Maybe this? *=New corrections (my best) 

Verse 1

Always thinking about her (bout her)
I'm in too* deep
Feel like a wreck in the morning (morning)
'Cause* I always* get no sleep

Walk around all Day long
Waiting* for a chance
To get her body close to mine
For a little, for a little romance

Pre chorus

Every night when we go to bed
Thoughts comes rushing through my head

Chorus

All night. All night
Keep on fighting with the devil inside
All night. All night
Toss and turn 'till the morning light
Everytime she's near. I start to lose control
My heart's defeated
I surrender my soul
All night. All night
She keeps me up all night

Verse 2

Can't resist her body (body)
She's pulling me in
Almost like she's magnetic (netic)
Gotta touch her warm soft skin

Giving in to temptation
I'm losing the fight
Forbidden fruit, but I want it
Just wanna* have, have one bite

[kaalbas]

Hey

Thank you very much for taking the time to help me. I really appriciate it. 👍🏻

[kaalbas]

Could I say: "I never get any sleep"

[Gill]

No problem if you had more I could do them too.  Yes that sounds good

[Gill]

Could I say: "I never get any sleep"

Yes that sounds good

[kaalbas]

Thank you very much. I don't have any at the moment but I'll keep that in mind. 😀👍🏻

[Paulski]

Hi kaalbas

Looks good to me.
I didn't like this phrase though "her warm soft skin".
I don't like double adjectives as they are not conversational.
Maybe "her tender skin" or "her forbidden skin" ?

Otherwise suits the genre I think 
good work!
Paul