The Hand of Fate

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« on: May 19, 2017, 01:23:22 PM »
God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?

I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!

My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate

As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry died by eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is on the nigh.

Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.

My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
All its Times n all its Dates
But I PAINT things my own way
I am the Hand of Fate

As I wined and dined Rasputin
He was killed by a guest's gun
DEPICTED as the Mad Monk
His 'Habits' became his undone

I have sailed with Chris Columbus
And discovered the New Lands
I PENNED all maps and charts
You now have in your hands.

Your memories n histories
Will one day fade away
Your colours of life
In BLACK and WHITE
Will turn a shade of GREY.


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« Last Edit: June 07, 2017, 12:02:42 AM by Jackdaw »
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« Reply #1 on: May 20, 2017, 01:21:40 PM »
This needs more work me thinks :-)
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« Reply #2 on: May 20, 2017, 05:58:16 PM »
Its all about progression ;) But it's still a great read

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« Reply #3 on: May 20, 2017, 06:00:44 PM »
Its all about progression ;) But it's still a great read

Cheers matey!!!
Take care
And ...
It's nice to know that not all peeps on here are so bias as to what lyrics or who they like?

Ps...
Some of my words and rhyme will be published within a famed Magazine.
The date being June the 6th.

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« Last Edit: May 20, 2017, 09:28:57 PM by Jackdaw »
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« Reply #4 on: May 20, 2017, 09:57:15 PM »
THE COLOURS OF LIFE

God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?

I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

As I DREW for Nostradamus
Dear Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.

Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.

Jackdaw1888 :-)


I like this but the flow is just not there yet "Dear Henry lost an eye" can you explain more thanks.

So far really good write Jack, welcome to the forum of lyric writers.

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« Reply #5 on: May 20, 2017, 10:04:47 PM »
THE COLOURS OF LIFE

God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?

I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

As I DREW for Nostradamus
Dear Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.

Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.

Jackdaw1888 :-)


I like this but the flow is just not there yet "Dear Henry lost an eye" can you explain more thanks.

So far really good write Jack, welcome to the forum of lyric writers.

Many thanks for your kind welcome.

Nostradamus warned King Henry11 re his fate and impending death.
He told him not to joust.

Jackdaw1888 :-)

Will edit to KING rather than DEAR
« Last Edit: May 20, 2017, 10:18:56 PM by Jackdaw »
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« Reply #6 on: May 20, 2017, 10:55:59 PM »
THE COLOURS OF LIFE

God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?

I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.

Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.

Jackdaw1888 :-)


Hi Jackdaw,

So very different but so interesting to read. Poetic and historical. I would have preferred to have noticed all the artistic references without them being obvious in Capitals but that is just my way of thinking. More artistic to leave it to the reader, perhaps?
I wonder what style you have in mind for the music?
Very enjoyable and thought-provoking. Like it so thankyou ...
Marrianna :-)

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« Reply #7 on: May 20, 2017, 10:58:53 PM »
To Oldbutyet

As for Kings of Lyrics?
I myself could never compete with the likes of. . .  Bob Dylan, Al Stewart or an enigma called Nick Drake?

Jackdaw1888 :-)
« Last Edit: May 20, 2017, 11:01:18 PM by Jackdaw »
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« Reply #8 on: May 20, 2017, 10:59:15 PM »
THE COLOURS OF LIFE

God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?

I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

As I DREW for Nostradamus
Dear Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.

Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.

Jackdaw1888 :-)


I like this but the flow is just not there yet "Dear Henry lost an eye" can you explain more thanks.

So far really good write Jack, welcome to the forum of lyric writers.

Many thanks for your kind welcome.

Nostradamus warned King Henry11 re his fate and impending death.
He told him not to joust.

Jackdaw1888 :-)

Will edit to KING rather than DEAR

Okay verse that could be work into something, thanks   8)

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« Reply #9 on: May 20, 2017, 11:16:14 PM »
THE COLOURS OF LIFE

God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?

I have rode with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED their Kingdoms fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
Made STATUES of 'em all!!!

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

As I DREW for Nostradamus
King Henry lost an eye
So we DOODLED in a book
POTRAYING Doom is surely nigh.

Knights Templars' then Crusade
And DRAW the Masons in
So I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes and sin.

The Colours of Life are Black and White
Their offspring shades of Grey
I am the 'Hand of Fate'
So I paint things my own way.

My BRUSHSTROKES tell Your story
I PENCIL in Your dates
Your hopes and dreams are FRAMED
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate.

Jackdaw1888 :-)


Hi Jackdaw,

So very different but so interesting to read. Poetic and historical. I would have preferred to have noticed all the artistic references without them being obvious in Capitals but that is just my way of thinking. More artistic to leave it to the reader, perhaps?
I wonder what style you have in mind for the music?
Very enjoyable and thought-provoking. Like it so thankyou ...
Marrianna :-)

Greetings Marrianna.
I am kind of useless with melodies/music.
My love is that of words.
But if I were attempt to put this into Song I would want it to be bob dylanesque by a kinda mary hopkin with guitar and backing fiddle.

Jackdaw1888 :-)
« Last Edit: May 20, 2017, 11:31:53 PM by Jackdaw »
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« Reply #10 on: May 21, 2017, 10:17:15 AM »
To Oldbutyet

As for Kings of Lyrics?
I myself could never compete with the likes of. . .  Bob Dylan, Al Stewart or an enigma called Nick Drake?

Jackdaw1888 :-)

We don't write to compete Jack, really good write you have here I've enjoy getting into it  8)

I'm getting back into a flow at the moment so if you're okay with the little changes i made to your lyrics i might be able to JUST put melody and vocal to YOUR lyrics, if not okay, thanks for the read Jack  8)

THE HAND OF FATE

God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR his earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?

I have sat with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED as their Kingdoms Fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
I even made STATUES of 'em all!!!

My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

The Colours of Life was then Black and White
Their offspring were shades of Grey
For I am the 'Hand of Fate'
I still paint things in my own way.

I DRANK with Nostradamus
King Henry lost his eye
We WORTE a book together
POTRAYING Doom when we where HIGH.

Knights Templars' then Crusade
I even DREW the Masons in
I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes from their SINS.

My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

The Colours of Life was then Black and White
Their offspring were shades of Grey
For I am the 'Hand of Fate'
I still paint things in my own way.

My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

Jackdaw1888 :-)

« Last Edit: May 21, 2017, 10:45:48 AM by Oldbutyet »

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« Reply #11 on: May 21, 2017, 11:50:28 AM »
To Oldbutyet

As for Kings of Lyrics?
I myself could never compete with the likes of. . .  Bob Dylan, Al Stewart or an enigma called Nick Drake?

Jackdaw1888 :-)

We don't write to compete Jack, really good write you have here I've enjoy getting into it  8)

I'm getting back into a flow at the moment so if you're okay with the little changes i made to your lyrics i might be able to JUST put melody and vocal to YOUR lyrics, if not okay, thanks for the read Jack  8)

THE HAND OF FATE

God handed me a PAINTBRUSH
Telling me to COLOUR his earth
So I nailed a cross to Jesus
Then asked Him what it's worth?

I have sat with all the Rulers
And SKETCHED as their Kingdoms Fall
Jestered Kings and Queens
I even made STATUES of 'em all!!!

My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

The Colours of Life was then Black and White
Their offspring were shades of Grey
For I am the 'Hand of Fate'
I still paint things in my own way.

I DRANK with Nostradamus
King Henry lost his eye
We WORTE a book together
POTRAYING Doom when we where HIGH.

Knights Templars' then Crusade
I even DREW the Masons in
I PAINTED them a Mystery
QUILLING secret codes from their SINS.

My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

The Colours of Life was then Black and White
Their offspring were shades of Grey
For I am the 'Hand of Fate'
I still paint things in my own way.

My BRUSHROKES tells Your story
I PENCIL in Your Dates
Your hopes and dreams are my FRIENDS
ETCHED by the Hand of Fate

Jackdaw1888 :-)



Many many thanks for your input.
Your comments are very much appreciated.

However, at the mo I am looking at this piece as a kind of unfinished piece of Art if that makes any sense? - my true passion being Art/Painting and Sketching etc etc.

I am at prez composing a couple of verses to add to it as I think it needs more.
Maybe a Columbus?
Maybe a Rasputin?

Not to sure yet what to do!!!

Take care
Have a nice day

Jackdaw1888 :-)

Ps...
If I were to change the colours verse it would be...

Colours of life are black n white
Their offspring shades of grey
But I am hand of fate
So i'll paint things my own way...

A bit fast and racey tones/beat
If you get my drift?

PPs...
I love your thoughts upon Nostadamus!

But here's my initial thoughts...

As I drank with Nostradmus
King Henry lost an eye
So we WROTE a book together
Saying Doom was on the nigh.
« Last Edit: May 21, 2017, 12:13:52 PM by Jackdaw »
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« Reply #12 on: May 21, 2017, 12:39:58 PM »
No problem Jack, going by what you have here im looking forward to reading more and hopefully hearing and seeing your art work, keep enjoying and thanks again   8)

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« Reply #13 on: May 21, 2017, 12:44:21 PM »
No problem Jack, going by what you have here im looking forward to reading more and hopefully hearing and seeing your art work, keep enjoying and thanks again   8)

I really really would appreciate your help.
I only have an ear for music.
And nothing else!!!

I.E. ... I cannot play or sing
Buy apparently I am kinda ok with words and research etc etc

Kind Regards
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« Last Edit: May 21, 2017, 12:47:49 PM by Jackdaw »
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« Reply #14 on: May 21, 2017, 06:47:33 PM »
No problem Jack, going by what you have here im looking forward to reading more and hopefully hearing and seeing your art work, keep enjoying and thanks again   8)

Rasputin and Columbus now added :-)

Regards
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Happiness is the Road itself.