Hi guys!
I've been very busy with exams for some time now, but I'm back with a new song. The guitar part is a little messy because I'm still practicing this song and I only play the guitar for like 9 months now, and the vocals are imperfect on this one-take recording, because it's quite a sad song, but I wanted to ask your opinions about it! It's called "More Than Mine".
Please be honest, I know about the guitar flaws, but any feedback is welcome.
This is the first really personal song I've been able to finish so far, so I'm pretty curious what you all think!
You can find the recording on Soundcloud:
https://soundcloud.com/user-388540497/more-than-mineLYRICS
Deafening silence
Around me
Present absence in the house
Not alone in coping
With loss
But I fight it on my own
Cause I don’t want my mom to see I’m crying
She doesn’t have to take part of my pain
I think about you always but I never bring it up
Cause I don’t want to see her cry no more
Head on her tear-stained pillow
She silently cries
Thinking of all the words
Lost with her goodbyes
And I lie beside her
She thinks I’m asleep
But actually I’m tearing up
Just hearing her weep
The moment she breaks deep, deep down I realize
That her tears hurt more than mine
She’ll never be with
Another than you
But I’ll be everyone for her
Don’t you worry
About us
She has me I am partly you
So I go on pretending that I’m smiling
My eyes forgot how to make tears
She’s getting better while I’m stuck in my pain
But it’s worth it cause she cries no more
Head on her tear-stained pillow
She silently cries
Thinking of all the words
Lost with her goodbyes
And I lie beside her
She thinks I’m asleep
But actually I’m tearing up
Just hearing her weep
The moment she breaks deep, deep down I realize
That her tears hurt more than mine
That her tears hurt more than mine