Hi Martin
These are good lyrics. The chorus has a real nice flow to it, I like it. Is the first verse from the perspective of the friend not in the bad place and verse two from the friend that is in the bad place? That's how I took it and I like the symmetry of that.
It is hard to comment on word choices without the music as I know when sung the words probably fit nice a snug into the music as they are. Although there is the one line with a lot of syllables I suspect when you sing it it rolls of the tongue nicely
My only comment is on the line 'Just my luck' as this tend (to me) to assume that you have bad luck, but the line before 'Oh but I stand up instead of laying down dying' suggests something positive, like you have fight and strength inside you. Maybe I have misunderstood. Not sure what to suggest as alternatives as not a lot choice to rhyme with the f word
Stuck/Unstuck maybe...I dunno
Good words though mate! I look forward to hearing them sung
Darren