Hi Greenburst
When I first read your lyric, I wasn't sure at all. It sounded like they'd been written in complete isolation from the music. But then I listened to your recording, and to some extent changed my mind.
It's nice to see some lyrics that don't follow the usual format, and they're certainly interesting, if a little arcane.
I think the verses are working really well, but the prechorus and chorus felt a little clumsy to me in terms of delivery. For me, there's melody in words, and some of your lines jarred to my ear. For example, "some pieces match badly" sounds very cluttered; I'd have gone for "some pieces fit badly." Also "they're about to tell stories" is very rushed - I don't know why you didn't sing "telling their stories" or even "starting their stories."
I would be a restorer but I dig away for all risk of yield.... what does this mean?
Musically, I really like this. The lo-fi folky feel really works for this song, and I don't know how fast you intend it to be when finished, but this speed works for me.