Hi!
Yes, 'That on-ly love (can break your heart)'.
I think the intro was a bit too long.
The first verse fine.
The chorus is too repetitive and it says too little.
Maybe just two repeats and a stronger melody or
the same melody and stronger words.
I know this goes against conventions but a chorus needs,
imo, a strong message OR a strong melody. Dreamers can
go for both of them.
It has to be different in some way.
Verse two really tells very little. Just some poetic language.
It ends with a repeat of the by now worn 'When you're in love'.
You say you wrote it in 30 minutes and it wrote it self. Give it
another 30 and maybe you'll be able to turn this into a really good
song. At now it's ok but a bit mediocre.
Cheers,
- Martin